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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
I'm known to disappear at times. Not drugs, or alcohol or loose morals. A yearning latches on me, like a junkie before a fix and I am off. I search. Traveling roads, real and imagined, Out where words are waiting to be tasted, rhymnes to be hummed, snatching from the ordinary a glimpse of mystic. So,I search returning with notebooks of crumpled paper Hope painted on my face like a porcelain doll. Surely,within these pages lies a flow of words- waltz-like in precision- perfect in their form. or a merging of wisdom and meaning, set to rthymn as true as the earth in it's spinning. A time or two I would catch that magic- So, I search, for the perfect poem one perfect time. sharyn [This message has been edited by shyvl (05-05-2008 07:55 AM).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
the length felt all right to me. i dig this part: or a merging of wisdom and meaning, set to a rthymn as true as the earth in it's spinning. that's exactly why i write: the elusive attempt to merge wisdom and meaning. haha |
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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
This is beautiful Sharyn... Made me smile and want to write. Tammy<333 |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india |
it is delightful insight in any soul. clever talks delay friendship! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I think this is a beautiful poem just the way it is. I always look for your poems and enjoy them very much. Ida |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Reading you is always a profound and nice experience Sharyn...I don't think the perfect poem exists...We need all kind of poems, otherwise the perfection, I think would be boring... Have a nice day yann |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
shyvl...we all search and never find I guess we know if we ever did we would lose our quest enjoyed you here |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sharon, your search for mots was time well-spent! I thoroughly enjoyed your poet's poem!    Linda |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The pleasure is provided by the continuing search. You expressed this secret ambition of every poet very efficiently! Beautiful. Love, Margherita  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
nicely done...this line plays especially well: "snatching from the ordinary a glimpse of mystic" |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Sharyn, The thought of this is fine. However, there are a number of misspelled words, and instances of misuse of words. I'd go over this with a fine tooth comb, and make the needed corrections. If you have a spell-checker I'd advise using it. Bobby |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Don't change the words! The flow is grand. Check the first verse..."on the me" I read it as..."latches onto me. Wonderful! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
...you're walking in my shoes, my friend. Kindly send them back home when the souls wear out so I can re-soul (not re-sole, you noticed) them == once again and get them back out there, seeking. If by chance you find it...send me the answer, please. And kep the shoes Jimmy |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I like long winding paths that lead me on a word journey. When I read you, I don't even need a map. Loving this, Sharyn. xoxox Alison |
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