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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
When we live in Paris we dream of Los Angeles, When we drive in Los Angeles we dream of Rio de Janeiro, when we samba in Rio de Janeiro we dream of Sydney, when we romance in Sydney we dream of Paris, so we come full circle as to love someone else is a road to love oneself. [This message has been edited by 2islander2 (05-03-2008 07:29 AM).] |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Great rhythmn as always but these last three lines are superb. "so we come full circle as to love someone else is a road to love oneself." I keep looking for hidden meaning and finding more to ponder. It will be on my mind all night. Thanks sharyn |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
You poetry gets better every day, yann. There are lovely thoughts behind this one. Ida |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yann, This is an improvement over your last one. A good source of information on Standard English Grammer is "The Cambridge Grammar of the English Language" by Huddleston and Pullum. It's a beautiful language. Bobby |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you sharyn, your comment made me happy... yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Ida, I am not stressed cause I know you read between the lines and understand poetry with mistakes... Thanks yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Bobby thanks for the information, I'm not familiar with english grammar and I'm afraid reading a grammar book would be boring and austere....However if this book is cheap i would perhaps buy it.... I think you should better get used to ups and downs in my poems... thanks again yann |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yann, No, it is not an inexpensive book, and it can be boring. I like your poems, and as I say, your grammar is improving steadily. Of course my own grammar leaves loads to be desired. Bobby |
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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
Yann, I think even I got the message that is between the lines of this one…  I think it’s beautiful. Tammy<333 |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Bobby and Tammy, What is right for me may be wrong for others, I don't know. have a nice day yann |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
ooh Yann you mentioned Sydney! lovely gifting here... only 110 more sleeps until Paris for me!! love RDBBe kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Roniece, make good dreams, you love so much Paris, I envy you. I surely mentioned Sydney romance thinking about you. kisses yann |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Enjoyed the circling of the globe with you! I've seen far too little of it, myself! "as to love someone else is a road to love oneself." ~ Yes, and the converse is also true.   Linda |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Linda, your comment enlightened my poem specially the ending..... yann |
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