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poddarku
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since 2008-01-15
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india

0 posted 2008-05-01 09:03 AM



Island
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They say it is five hour’s journey to land.
Five hours to see blue and green waves of salt.
Five hours for one blurred picture of seagulls,
Five hours to observe today is meeting
Tomorrow in a thin line of off-white.
Five hours to see, casually, human.
A too short time span to ponder on life,
Flashes of patchy memory and swigs
Of cheap wine, red, ruby, catching sun.
Gongs and buzzes, machine and man at wheel.
Five hours at most, and an island’s calm coast.
The island we have dreamed as a salt dream,
The island that we have craved to become.
At the horizon an island rises
As the human evolution’s lonely
World, welcoming society once again.

clever talks delay friendship!

© Copyright 2008 poddar kushal - All Rights Reserved
2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
1 posted 2008-05-01 11:24 AM


wonderful poem poddarku....I Enjoyed its great images and poetry...

  have a nice day

    yann

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
2 posted 2008-05-10 08:49 AM


quote:
Five hours to observe today is meeting
Tomorrow in a thin line of off-white.



Very lovely, dear Ku!

You take us always on the very special rides of your deep ponderings.

Love,
Margherita

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2008-05-10 04:00 PM


love the ending!

hiddensmiles
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at the beach... i wish
4 posted 2008-05-10 04:09 PM


nice write!

JJ

Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
5 posted 2008-05-11 10:06 AM


Wonderful Write!

ARCTIC WIND

shyvl
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since 2008-04-11
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texas, usa
6 posted 2008-05-11 11:59 PM


Deeply introspective.  i love the way you used the repetition of 5 hours to stress the endless ness of time.
sharyn

inkedgoddess
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Ohio
7 posted 2008-05-12 08:10 AM


i love the salt dream
it nourishes the soul in wait

Marchmadness
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So. El Monte, California
8 posted 2008-05-12 06:17 PM


Lovely thoughts, Poddarku.
                   Ida

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
9 posted 2008-05-13 09:55 AM


I enjoy reading your thoughts ~ and you express them so poetically. The images are vivid ~ and intriguing. For example ~

"Flashes of patchy memory and swigs
Of cheap wine, red, ruby, catching sun."


Linda

Midnitesun
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Gaia
10 posted 2008-05-13 09:59 AM


As always, you transport the reader beyond the visual into the psyche of the human spirit, the raw universal 'oneness' of humanity.
steavenr
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11 posted 2008-05-13 02:08 PM


very interesting...very captivating
JamesMichael
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12 posted 2008-05-15 04:41 AM


Enjoyed...James
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