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HM3 Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 169TX |
A shadow in the room Feeling so consumed Grief tearing me apart With just a broken heart And my shadow in the room A shadow in the room Surrounded by the gloom Death had left behind Wandering through my mind And my shadow in the room A shadow in the room Where love became entombed But swells within my heart So tomorrow I will start To heal My shadow in the room Work like money doesn't matter, love like you've never been hurt, dance like nobody's watching... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I really liked the structure of this one...and specially liked how that when you broke that structure, it drew attention to the healing...well done |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
I as well, liked the structure and repetition of your poem. Pleasure reading it. Thanks sharyn |
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Caliban Member
since 2008-04-23
Posts 57 |
To echo the others, the structure was interestingly done. Very subtl. Nicely done. Muna seasaimid le ceartas, ní sheasfaidh ceartas linn - Francis Bacon |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Interesting Write Indeed!!  ARCTIC WIND |
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