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Open Poetry #42

Dreamless Ruins

Snowflake From Hell
Senior Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion

0 posted 2008-04-15 01:39 PM

Can you hear the violins playing your song?
(My mind is corrosive)
Do you ignore them or play along?
(My eyes are explosive)
Rather you kill me with a beat,
(My words are silent)
Than ask me to take a backseat.
(My rage is violent)
Mirror, mirror upon the wall,
(My dismay stains my brain)
Walk an endless hall.
(My life source begins to drain)
So narrow-minded liberate your mind,
(My mind is CORROSIVE)
Broaden your horizons and you'll find.
(My eyes are EXPLOSIVE)
Land of confusion and grief,
(My words are SILENT)
Live in a world full of disbelief.
(My rage is VIOLENT)
Dreamless Ruins, says it all,
(My mind IS cOrRoSiVe)
Dream on, stand proud and tall.
(my eyes ARE eXpLoSiVe)

violence may not be the answer, but it does make good headway

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

1 posted 2008-04-15 03:23 PM

Very interesting. Unique style of phrasing and structure. Thanks for sharing
sharyn

Seoulair
Senior Member

since 2008-03-27

Posts 807
Seoul S.Korea

2 posted 2008-04-15 03:34 PM

Interesting conversation. Dreamless does ruin.
I like this poem.

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