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Open Poetry #42

4 Winter Haiku

ilsm
Member

since 2008-04-13

Posts 61
UK

0 posted 2008-04-14 07:02 PM

Winter Poems

1.     Winter: morning’s cold -
        Like a wet, freezing blanket
        Lying on your back,

2.     Cold, dark evenings
        Lovers together entwine
        In warm embraces.

3.     Misty fingers creep
        Like smoke from damp burning wood
        Past frost-tinted leaves,

4.     As Winter deepened
        My Star grew ever brighter,
        But faded with Spring.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2008-04-14 07:45 PM

Mr. Mackay...

Haiku strung as the beginning of a choka
are some of my favorite reads. Thank you
for the four. I was hesitant to read of
winter, for ours is only just now passing,
as we welcome warmly the onset of spring
[which for us, may pass over into summer
by tomorrow, and it all just started today
it seems.

]

I also wanted to thank you for your comments
on my brother's poem. You were spot on with
your interpretation.

But you see, he keeps nagging me in my dreams...
So I need to write it out.

Thank you.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2008-04-14 08:25 PM

Wow!! What a nice entrance you've made.
I enjoyed them all, and Haiku #3 is my favorite.

Welcome to Passions, ilsm~

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2008-04-14 08:32 PM

Ilsm,

These short poems are very nice.

Bobby

[This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (04-14-2008 09:39 PM).]

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