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tnhness
Junior Member

since 2008-04-14

Posts 15

0 posted 2008-04-14 02:21 AM

A spear of grass through the heart
That would be a good start
All it takes is a wind gust of 76 miles per hour
Never mind the dirt on my knees
It’ll fall with the breeze
You see I was over there planting a flower
No I don’t know the name
I couldn’t pronounce it anyways
But I like the picture and it suites me all the same
Now I’m praying for a raindrop

I’ve positioned my house so that the roof channels water to just that flower
If my math is correct
She’ll get three perfect drops per hour
It was very hard to move my house
It’s heavy and cumbersome much like myself
But for the sake of that flower it was worth every pain
Lord if I go to church will it rain
Lord if I pray more will it rain
Lord if I turn away for a time will it rain
I don’t think this is what he had in mind
Why we should do these things
People are blind deaf and mute

I’ll be content to sit by my flower
And watch her slowly whither away from lack of rain

If you feel up to it
After you’ve gotten everything you prayed for in church
Pray for my flower

Seoulair
Senior Member

since 2008-03-27

Posts 807
Seoul S.Korea

1 posted 2008-04-14 02:28 AM

Beautiful poem. Very nice.
And a warm welcome to this wonderful site.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2008-04-14 08:25 AM

TN~
Welcome to PiP~
I look forward to reading more of you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2008-04-14 11:46 AM

Very intresting poem and title. Welcome to the sit tnhness.
Ida

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

4 posted 2008-04-15 04:52 AM

I will pray for your flower that it flourish as much as your writing. Thanks for the pleasure of this piece.
sharyn

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

5 posted 2008-04-15 08:28 AM

this brought me a smile and a wish that I get to read more of your lovely thoughts... welcome to our pages blue.... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2008-04-15 10:37 AM

I liked the way you "moved the house" to
suit the flower's needs. Looking outside
the box suits you.

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icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

7 posted 2008-04-20 11:49 AM

Your poem made me smile. That seems to take a lot these days. Thank you.

I am glad I built my house to help water my gardens in the rain. I am not sure I would be up to moving it now. *grin*

Welcome to PiP!

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

8 posted 2008-04-20 11:50 AM

WELCOME TO PIP!

ARCTIC WIND

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2008-04-20 02:17 PM

I really like the thought behind this poem, being a lover of things small that are growing against all odds, maybe your flower would have thrive without you having moved the house, but you'll never know. Thanks for the thoughts this brought me. Welcome to Pip!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

10 posted 2008-04-20 06:41 PM

I enjoy the way you highlight the needs of a single flower, your desire to nurture it against all odds, while accepting the possibility it might fail. To move a house to suit a flower...shows you can think beyond your own personal needs. And I especially appreciate that you don't 'beg' any supernatural power(s) to intervene.
Welcome to Pips!

tnhness
Junior Member

since 2008-04-14

Posts 15

11 posted 2008-04-20 10:13 PM

thanks all for the kind remarks and insight.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

12 posted 2008-04-21 08:54 PM

the title caught my attention--the content kept me there...loved your humor...imagination...style...welcome...truly loved it all

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

13 posted 2008-04-22 12:26 PM

Tnhness,

Good luck. I hope you get some rain.

Bobby

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

14 posted 2008-04-22 10:42 AM

Loved this and welcome to pip!

I will pray that you find the strength to water the flower yourself.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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