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Broken locks and handles… |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia 
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No it doesn’t bother me I knew it would be this way you being straightforward me being complex And your doors are open for a reason in fact they were never closed the locks were broken well before the handles were in place Yes your windows still attract all the eyes of passersby who crave to know you for a brief moment in time But your mystery is unscrambling slowly as your buttons fall and your eyes linger on the inner sides of my smile For it’s there that I glimpse your soul Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... [This message has been edited by Roniece Dawson-Bruce (02-04-2008 03:13 AM).] |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Roniece, Truly wonderful and a keeper for sure. A |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
RDB, I think your writing is so true & it always seems so effortless. Like this lots... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms r & b, interesting perception, enjoyed it |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A very intriguing write, dear Roniece! Brava! baci Margherita  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Very Interesting! ARCTIC WIND |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Roniece, how lovely this is! I love the form! Just perfect! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like the way you open your heart...nice things come out...James |
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Bobby Jordan Member
since 2007-08-13
Posts 491Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo RDB, Keep your eyes off my soul. It's private property. Loved this poem. Bobby |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a fine and most interesting 'write!' I am especially fond of the imagery of: "myster(ies)...unscrambling (with)... eyes linger(ing) on the inner sides of (a) smile(!) For it’s there that I glimpse your soul" v. serious, sustained applause of this 'penning!' |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Ali.... you are very special to me - thank you Simon... thank you so much for your very generous comments Mr Daark... perception sometimes is over rated thank you Margherita... ooh I love being intrigued! thank you Arctic...thank you, I do so enjoy you reading my work Dixie... you are beautiful... thank you James... thank you that was a lovely comment Bobby...I love the 'yo' and I always respect private property thank you Bruce... you always make me smile.. thank you my friend Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india |
your doors are open for a reason in fact they were never closed wonderful,wonderful |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
"on the inner sides of my smile" -- I love that description. And I really like the construction of this one, it adds to the impact of the poem. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I love 'inner' smiles! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
..."your eyes linger on the inner sides of my smile For it’s there that I glimpse your soul" ~ Oh, Roneice, I actually had a little quiver with the beauty of your soulful words.  ~ and you, Radiant One, know all about smiles! Loving hug 'n a smile, Linda  |
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