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Britt_Brat
Junior Member

since 2008-03-05

Posts 37
Knoxville, TN

0 posted 2008-04-07 03:17 PM

I love Jason with all my heart. I would cry for him, die for him and anything he wanted, well almost anything. He makes me ever so happy, and content. I feel relaxed and free around him. When he looks into my eyes I feel like as if he is looking at my soul, which forever shall be his. I love him more than he will ever know.I want the best for him, so he knows how he makes me feel, and for ever make me feel. He is more to me than he could ever understand. I have realized that without him I am nothing more then an emotionless shell walking around trying to find him. So I could feel the love he feels for me, and able to show emotion back. I love him now more than anything and more then he could ever know he is my Jason. He is the very fiber of my being. The very essences of my soul, and now till the end of time the keeper of my heart. I wish I only had it in me to tell him this. I wish he understand the depth of what I mean. To pour out my thoughts to him, to see what he would do. I love him so much that without him I would never recover. My life would be meaning less with out his warm loving arms around me, or his soft kisses, or the very touch of his skin against mine. Or the smell of his sweet scent that makes my head spin. Just being without him makes my life have no meaning. For if we should part are ways I think he will feel the same way. I just can’t imagine life without him. He is my everything.
This is to my boyfriend who had been the best thing in my life the past few mountths

im lost in a world of love

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2008-04-07 03:20 PM

Britt_Brat,

This is hard to read. It also seems to run all together.

Try it in black, or dark blue, and break it up into strophes.

Bobby

xTr3m3sT
Member

since 2008-03-03

Posts 415

2 posted 2008-04-07 05:45 PM

This seems more like a story then an actual poem. I would suggest looking up different types of poetic structures on Google and continue from there.

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