Open Poetry #42 |
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relief of sorrow |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA ![]() |
Only cracked was the closet door dared you open it a little more??? hard to resist what in your mind persists.... the hangers give way to what hangs there every day over your head too deep to give way figure you can't win for losing like all of the rest chicken long gone the hen flew from the nest now pecking away at anothers sorrow and grief feeding off the empty begging for relief.... ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Ocean Vuong Junior Member
since 2008-03-29
Posts 37NYC |
The rhyming is more of a distraction from the images here, perhaps starting with the hens will stamp a sharper bolder message. good luck, -ocean |
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Seoulair Senior Member
since 2008-03-27
Posts 807Seoul S.Korea |
beautiful. love the read. |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
The angst fairly exhudes from this, fine writing... John |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Thank you for the replies. ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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