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gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

0 posted 2008-04-04 10:04 AM

I am amazed at how close
The little sparrow comes to me.
Is it the spirit reincarnate
Of someone who knew me?

Ah, it’s the bird seed, and it knows
I am benevolence, flinging down manna
Through the cheerful, blue air,
And it knows it is safe, unless I wield
The lightening bolt (sudden motion)

And become the god of wrath . . .

[This message has been edited by gilead (04-04-2008 10:56 AM).]

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

1 posted 2008-04-04 10:20 AM

I used the word "lest", and I don't think it is used correctly. I am trying to use a single word that would mean---as long as I do not. Any suggestions?

Art

r v wooo
Senior Member

since 2007-08-07

Posts 656

2 posted 2008-04-04 10:40 AM

must go now but will ponder "lest"...maybe will have a suggestion, tomorrow!

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

3 posted 2008-04-04 10:50 AM

Thanks, rv wooo. When minds merge upon a path toward solving problems, solutions emerge.

Have a good day,

Art

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

4 posted 2008-04-04 10:50 AM

marvellous observation...

yann

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

5 posted 2008-04-04 10:52 AM

thanks, yann. I always enjoy your comments.

Art

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

6 posted 2008-04-04 10:55 AM

Ah, the cat just walked in and said, "Instead of lest, try, unless. Who can argue with a cat!

Still, if anyone thinks of a better word or words, please pass it on.

Art

Seoulair
Senior Member

since 2008-03-27

Posts 807
Seoul S.Korea

7 posted 2008-04-04 01:12 PM

wonderful. Shared the same experience. Those thing makes me wondering.

love the read.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

8 posted 2008-04-04 10:02 PM

Such simple observations can produce such great little poems, sometimes.
Ida

effjayel
Senior Member

since 2007-09-30

Posts 1474
At the Crossroads of Infinity

9 posted 2008-04-05 04:20 AM

Art, I tried this & it worked for me...

"And it knows it is safe, unless perchance I wield
The lightning bolt (sudden motion)"

Good write, John ( BTW, no E in lightning..

)

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

10 posted 2008-04-05 06:08 AM

He would not come near, if he could not trust you 100% ... animals have a sixth sense!

This is very lovely.

And then of course the cat's suggestion is the perfect one ... for the same reason!

Love,
Margherita

r v wooo
Senior Member

since 2007-08-07

Posts 656

11 posted 2008-04-05 11:07 AM

am back and see you have resolved your problem...that is good...#42 moves quickly there is a lot of activity...i enjoy the reading.

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