Open Poetry #42 |
My Time |
kudanesh Member
since 2007-12-01
Posts 135Peterborough,England |
My Time Funny how time stands still funny how time goes so fast it makes you ill When good times go and bad time stay Don’t you wish it were the other way Time does fly when you’re having And it all slows down when you feeling glum I wish I could keep my time Put it in my pocket and call it mine Then I could have all the time I need To do what I want would that come under greed Well if it dose I don't care No one in the world would turn down free time anywhere So all that's in the concept of time Can be found all over you have to make up your mind Of what you should do And witch way to use it that's suits you I hope you have fun with the rest of your time I know I have wasted allot of mine so I'm so sorry I have to say I have thrown too much of mine away |
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Seoulair Senior Member
since 2008-03-27
Posts 807Seoul S.Korea |
interesting! enjoyed the read. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Andrew, another very good one! Wise too, yes, we should not waste it. Love, Margherita |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Andrew, "Time gets more precious when there is less of it to waste ... I enjoyed your post & the underlying message..a couple of suggestions & a question.... you should use spellcheck, I think it should be Don’t you wish it was the other way & not were the other way, Doe’s & not dose, and a lot as opposed to allot. Also, is the word fun missing from the end of line 4? Having seen your critique comment about your "Ghastly" spelling, I have a feeling I might have said something similar before. No offence intended by the foregoing...Cheers John |
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