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Open Poetry #42

night

c_fuller
Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 52
california

0 posted 2008-03-30 01:23 PM

the cloak of night

(falling
slowly

as a leaf
twists
in the wind
before coming
to
rest
on blades of grass
already
browned and dormant
from the eyes
of
autumn)

brings to me, serenity.

Brian23
Member

since 2007-11-03

Posts 73
Belfast, Ireland

1 posted 2008-03-30 01:50 PM

Nice poem, yet somewhat too simple.

Seoulair
Senior Member

since 2008-03-27

Posts 807
Seoul S.Korea

2 posted 2008-03-30 06:09 PM

heart in peace. A beauty!
And the words guided my eyes.

c_fuller
Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 52
california

3 posted 2008-04-22 02:54 PM

thank you

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2008-04-22 03:59 PM

Not only was this wonderful but it also mentions two of my favorite people!!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2008-04-22 04:25 PM

Simple is good.
Ida

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

6 posted 2008-04-22 11:09 PM

Wonderful leaf imagery-left me longing for more. Thank you for sharing
sharyn

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

7 posted 2008-04-22 11:35 PM

"browned and dormant
from the eyes
of
autumn"

nice line...intricate simplicity

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