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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2008-03-25 06:16 AM

Then

When I think of you,
look at your picture,
hear your sweet voice
I'm reminded of the
sensuality we shared.

Then...

As you know
I have memorized
your kiss and
recorded the texture
of your lips
to sustain me until
you're in my
arms again.

And again,
and again,
and again.

So upon
that day
please don't hesitate
and for goodness sake
don't be late,
I can hardly wait
to see you then.

JamesLee
25March
2008

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2008-03-25 06:29 AM

smiles and then smiles at you again my sweet James!! you really are such a romantic writer! but be careful our dear friend Bobby might pick you up on those needless 'ands' !!!

sorry Bobby, couldn't resist!! you know I love you!

love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

[This message has been edited by Roniece Dawson-Bruce (03-25-2008 07:46 AM).]

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2008-03-25 12:32 PM

James,

This works pretty well. The repeated "and again" is all right in this case.

See that dear RDB, nah-nah-nah-naaaah.

Bobby

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2008-03-25 12:38 PM

I can just see and hear the two of you exchanging tender thoughts. This is lovely, dear James.
Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2008-03-25 04:13 PM

Thank you Roniece, Robert and Margheria for the wonderful responses...James

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

5 posted 2008-03-26 10:46 AM

And

I smiled.

And then
I read Roniece
amd smiled.

And then
I read Bobby
and laughed.

And then
I went to work.

---

A

P.S. James, your love poems delight me.

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

6 posted 2008-03-26 11:04 AM

Very beautifully done, James. It's a theme I approach with much caution, as so often "love" poems are too much about the poet's personal problems as opposed to excellence in prosody.

Regards,

Art

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

7 posted 2008-03-26 03:38 PM

hello james, i agree with art...

Love is a very delicate subject to write about....

You do it very well....

yann

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2008-03-28 04:24 PM

thank you Alison, gilead and 2islander2 for the wonderful responses...James

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