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Felix Gets No Basket
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Felix Gets No Basket |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania 
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Felix watches his eleven year old son Angelo’s eyes when he sees his basket Easter morning. It’s a delight for him. He remembers back to Easter in foster care when he was eleven. It was his first year in foster care. Mom had always managed to make up a basket, and give him some little Easter treat. When he was eleven, the closest Felix came to Easter, was cleaning up after his foster brother James had gotten sick from eating his Easter candy. It was an Easter Felix never forgot. Bobby |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Sunday we're having a big Easter egg hunt for a lot of kids. We do it every year. I so wish Felix could come. Easter wasn't much for me either so this is my way of making up for it. Ida |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india |
it is wonderfully soothing and nostalgic clever talks delay friendship! |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Happy Easter Felix, Sally, Wawa, Butch and the gang... Happy Easter Bobby  love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this...I liked getting all those eggs and candy...it was lots of fun...James |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Ida, That's a great idea. There was an Easter egg hunt across the street at the playground this morning. The playground is totally paved. It was fun for the kids from the hood anyway, they loved it. It wasn’t so much of a hunt. It was more of a chase. Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Poddarku, Thanks for your kind words on this. Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear RDB, Everyone here in Philly wishes you a happy Easter too. Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
James, You're the "good" James, you deserve good stuff. The one in this poem is the bad James. He deserves to be smacked around a little bit. Sally and Felix will take care of that later. Bobby |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Hi Robert: Strong stuff when you relate it to Easter as chocolate bunnies as opposed to Easter as Easter. None of the characters make the leap, which is a fine statement in itself. I question the syntax of the first stanza. "Felix watches his eleven year old son Angelo’s eyes when he sees his basket Easter morning." I understand that it means "Felix watches the eyes of his eleven year old son, Angelo..." Could it stand a little clearing up? Best, Jimbeaux |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Thanks Jim, I feel it is quite clear, and understandable the way it is. Bobby |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Hi Bobby. OK. It was just a thought. At least I resisted the temptation to rewrite the lines. Are we similar? I don't mind suggestions, but I don't take too kindly to people who rewrite other people's poems. Not so much in this forum, but in C/A, we get a lot of rewriting of complete poems. I used to do that too, but I've changed my mind completely on it's usefulness to the author. And it now seems wildly presumptuous. Ida: I either did it to you sometime back, or wrote an entirely different poem on the notion of "screeding." Sorry 'bout that. I learn as I grow. Although, at my age, you'd think I might have caught on sooner. Best, Jim Aitken [This message has been edited by oceanvu2 (03-22-2008 05:39 PM).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Dear Bobby, I do so want to invite Felix to our big Easter egg hunt in my yard tomorrow. I am expecting about thirty adults and children for dinner and our annual egg hunt. May he find the joy in his son's Easter that was denied him in his childhood. I am glad his mama tried. Love, Joyce |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Jim, Thanks, I don't think people should try to rewrite other peoples poems. It's like trying to seal a persons soul. It can't be done, and shouldn't be attempted. BTW, what is C/A? Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Joyce, I would love to go to your Easter egg hunt. It must be fun. Here, the eggs are spread out on the concrete surface of the playground early in the morning. The kids are there with their small baskets, or empty pockets. At a signal, the rush to the eggs is on. It's great fun, and the little ones don't fight over the eggs. Yes, Mom tried real hard. She was an angel. Bobby |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I totally agree with you Bobby that no one should ever rewrite someone else's poem. I'm a very good natured person but that would make me mad and I agree It's like stealing someone's soul. Ida |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Hi Bobby and other non-re-writers. C/A is the Critical Analysis forum at PiP. I get a kick out of posting poems there because people yap on at length. And it's still just yappin'! Got you email address. Your book is coming from Barnes and Noble, and they are letting me down on their 2-3 day service. Support the poets! Pay retail! Jim Aitken |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
hi bobby, i enjoyed reading your poem and the comments whith go along (is that correct?)...In France too Easter egg hunt (strange word) makes children happy and running in the gardens...I would like to make Felix smile someday.... regards yann |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Ida, I'm glad you agree. Rewriting someone’s poem is a little bit presumptive. Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Jim, Thanks for ordering my book. Yes, money is a nice thing, and I hope that you will enjoy the read. Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yann, Thanks for the kind words on the poem. It's easy to make a Felix smile. Just decent treatment will most times do the trick. Bobby |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Infinitely painful moments for Felix. Those moments create trauma lasting for a lifetime sometimes, but with love healing is possible. I feel with Felix, very much. The concise direct form of poetry you use never fails to impress. Happy Easter! Love, Margherita |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Margherita, Thanks Hon. Luckily, Felix has known a lot of love in his life, from many wonderful people. It is still a mystery to Felix why it is that way. I'm pleased you enjoy the way I write. Bobby |
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