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the thinks (or ...rain in retrospect) rp
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the thinks (or ...rain in retrospect) rp |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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The parenthetical title is there because I realized that the date of my initial post was 2.1.05--twenty six days before the death of my sister, Cathy, and also prior to the destruction wrought by hurricane Katrina) * * * some thing I just can't think about - me - who cannot seem to cease the thinks from standing there in line to board the rollercoaster me as the cart screams dangerous in the curve ahead I plead: "plant your feet and pray" for we are riding on one rail. some things I dare not think about - me - who never ceases dream the brink of all raw edge despair tightening elastic string calculating height and mass devil-wing the depth I weep: "loose your feet and pray" for we have left no room to fail. something I won't care about - me - who cannot stop the tears I blink the waters of the tide behind the levee of my lids sandbag of the scars I sigh: "take a chance and pray" for we don't have much else to do. * * * weird |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I just hate a bad case of the thinks.. sheesh Though the poetry is purdy fine! a repost,eh? mebbe I should do that..original thought bein' as scarce as it is. *grin* Good to see ya m'witch hugs n'stuff |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You'd be the one I wanted to hear from...  I miss you Ed. If ever find my own muse again, I'd love to write a duet with you again. I need a re-baptism. I love you.  |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I was really glad to open PiP and see that you had returned to post a poem. I have missed you - weird, huh. Anyway, my first thought was what a helluva a lot for any one person to go through - the death of a sibling and then Katrina. Some times, life's tests just seem too unfair to even try to comprehend. Next, I read your poem and thought how much it touched me - and I was glad that you had prefaced it. I think prefaces can often be obstacles, but this time, I thought it allowed me to read with the understanding that your poetry deserves. Finally, I was touched by these lines .. the weird lines? Nothing seems "weird" to me about this poem -- your poetry saw before the rest of the world did. something I won't care about - me - who cannot stop the tears I blink the waters of the tide behind the levee of my lids sandbag of the scars I sigh: "take a chance and pray" for we don't have much else to do. You leave me speechless with those words. Alison |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Alison--you have been leaving ME speechless--with the quality and the quality of your work. And yanno? I...I dunno. Thanks for you sensitivity here, but I think I should point out that I went through none of it alone. I had a lot of help. thank you lovie, now that mercury has gone direct, I may end my vow of silence. And hopefully find some new writing material too. And for the record, I'm blaming the last seven years of my life on a crummy Saturn return!  love ya talented one! and awwwwwwwwww....Edder! smile  thanks lovie. I'm okay. nod (I think.) smile |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, darlin'. And for the record, I think you are more than 'okay'. |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
beautiful m'friend! I have so missed reading you |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
your talent screams to be read you make me sit on the edge of my seat with the hair on my neck standing up you are an echo of ripples on waters skin lost your muse? Clearly I doubt that for how can breath be gone as long as the breeze still flows loved you then love you now |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ah...TIMA!!! I've been meaning to wave hey to you for some time now. so HEYYYYYYYYYY... and Helen...I just...love you. I love you both, actually. Because, well, they are lovely, are they not? to you both with my gratitude. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Wow, I didn't know, and I'm sorry. been out of touch too long, but a great write, and great to see you. Jason |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
I didn't know either, but I too am glad to see you back. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
it doesn't surprise me a bit.the words speak loudly what was, what is a and what will be. I listen. and when you need me, I am here. I love you muchly. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Not weird at all Karen~~ so this is the reason for the last 7 years? "I'm blaming the last seven years of my life on a crummy Saturn return! " M |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
~sigh~ No need to repeat, but I will anyway: your heart always beats a loud true drum, one which echoes my often-silent psyche. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks all. You all have been so patient with me, and I really hope this didn't come off as even MORE hand-wringing. I just looked back, and thought it was..weird. (Much of my poetry during that time had a theme of levee's breaking, so I was like, wow.) I'm doing much better than I was, too. And I continually grateful for this network of emotional support. Maybe I should try writing something a little happier. thanks again |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
How did this get way up here? hmmm... things are getting even weirder... *chuckle* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Okay. Now I'm seeing things. Sheesh.  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Karen, me too I am happy that you post again! And I am in awe of this high level poem, which must have reached the divine listeners for its intensity and its beauty ... hovering above the sighs/prayers. Some well aligned planets are there too, see what you have created. Love and peace. Margherita |
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