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'Deer & Toe Shall not go to the Ball
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'Deer & Toe Shall not go to the Ball |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity 
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. Toe was invited to a ‘Do’ To celebrate the closing of the year They said he could bring a friend too So he chose Balladeer ‘Deer said we must make an impression And should wear our finest clothes Toe said then I have a confession Because I ain’t got none of those So they jumped into Toe’s rusty Chevy And headed into china town To see tailor Wing Chan Lee In order to purchase 2 new gowns After choosing the material from the many racks Of silk that were on display They agreed they would come back And collect them the next day It was the morning of the celebration But Toe was not at home And much to‘Deer’s consternation He had to return alone When he arrived outside the shop He could not believe what he saw The place was surrounded by the cops Looking for the missing door Poor old Wing was sat inside Surrounded by the Feds He looked at ‘Deer with tears in his eyes And this is what he said All my life I spend at this job Work most of the night & day A gang come to the shop and rob Take all my stock away He knew that Toe was going to moan But this sad tale he had to tell So he looked up the number for Toe‘s ‘phone And called him on his cell Hello Toerag, this is ‘Deer And I have bad news for you I fear I got here a little late Now we cannot go out on that date The police have cordoned off the shop, Toe, many crooks steal the cloth "Ignorance is the Enemy...." |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
Very clever. Enjoyed... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Write ARCTIC WIND |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Thanks Simon,James Michael has now waved the red flag at the boys so this could get interesting ! |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Why thank you Michael, glad you to see you are staying in one place for a while.... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
cute one John, enjoyed this |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Thank you kindly GS.... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Aha! I knew it was only a matter of time before you and your comedic wit would take on Toe and Balladeer!  Thanks for the lol's. I'd wager that old buck, Toe, will still go! ~ whether he has clothes or not! He wouldn't want to pass up a date with his beloved Ball-a-deer! |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
That predictable huh? Oh well, you probably know what I'm going to get up to next...think Maple syrup & Mounties.... |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Let's see....Effayel is now on list.... |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Would that be A list, Hit list or one to watch list Toe? [This message has been edited by effjayel (03-15-2008 03:18 PM).] |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Pretty funny, John. I think the list is a good place for you. |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Thanks A, just like to know what the list actually is....Now, if it is a list of sparring partners, bring it on !! John |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
a very interesting tale, i really enjoyed it... yann |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Thanks Yann, as you are new to the family, you may want to check the related links and / or previous posts out. I thnik you may get even more out of it if you do. thanks for reading & commenting... John |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this...looks like you got a nibble from Toerag...and now he says you're on the list...I hope thats not the list where he eggs your house and steals your car and girlfriend...of course there are "other" lists....James |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
James, I have no worries on that score, I have altered my profile & given your address as my place of residence...You might want to put Duanne (Dog) on standby ! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You're having too much fun... Watch out for flak!  |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
and here I thought that only Toerag had a death wish on this site....guess I wuz wrong |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
So you must have been watching the news, we've had some recent eggings over here, and car chases, and court appearances.... By the way Dog has been on standby for a while over some things his mouth said, but I think he close to getting his show back soon...James |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Excellent work, Sir! You put a lot into this very enjoyable piece. It inspires me to work a little harder with my craft. Best wishes, Art |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Do you have a second? Like when men fought duels? Just a thought. You got me laughing and I pressed a superman cape for you, and a sword that cuts right to the point, and .. (checks my bags of tricks) ... I'll get back to you on the rest. A |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This is such a cute and clever write, John. You always make me laugh. Ida |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
. Sunshine, I’m keeping an eye out for the gruesome twosome, now you tell me to watch out for flak as well, as far as I can remember, I did not attack flak… ‘Deer, A painful death for you is not on my list But I can make it come true if you really insist Now you just have to choose how you would like to go And when this battle you lose I’ll bury you with ‘Ol Toe…. James, seems Dog & I have a few things in common. Apparently my mouth has been causing me some problems also…. Gilead, Thanks. I did put a lot into it as you say, I just wanted to make sure I was remembered should I meet with an unfortunate accident. Alison, You got the job. No one I’d rather have in my corner, I would save on the ironing & forget the cape… seems like I may be needing something akin to the shroud of Turin…… Ida, I am happy to make you laugh, just remember these good times if the heavy mob catch me off guard….. . |
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