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c_fuller Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 52california |
she moves, glides really, across my soul. liquid wind around my glass heart. not as a river ebbs, but as a tear traces a path from eye to cheek. as a ripple echoes upon a once-still pond. as a child floats in a womb, our child. soft. as if a gentle breeze takes the time to say hello in your ear. she knows not her essence. and it is this innocence that is her charm, and her beauty. oh how i love this woman! would that i had the words that could describe this feeling! alas, to convey this heart would be to betray all language. sometimes words have no meaning powerful enough to pay justice to those that hear them, or say them. but when i watch her walk, this liquid loveliness, i forget all about words. and think only of diving into her and swimming in her ocean until my words can become her beach... |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
This is good, I especially like the lines " liquid wind around my glass heart" and " swimming in her ocean until my words can become her beach... " but it all works for me, enjoyed John |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india |
yes it is very talented piece.i am adding you to my library clever talks delay friendship! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions. This is outstanding! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Extremely well done, my friend. Beautiful write. jimmy |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I love all this! What a neat and unique analogy! Definitely a keeper! miscellanea |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
By the way, WELCOME! We're glad to have you on board! miscellanea |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...James |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
There is "liquid loveliness" in each and every line of this exquisite poem of complete and utter adoration! Your pen is connected to your heart!  EA |
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c_fuller Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 52california |
well thank you all for your fabulous replies! sorry i took so long to get back, just got back from hawaii! |
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Seoulair Senior Member
since 2008-03-27
Posts 807Seoul S.Korea |
Very romantic. Wonderful read. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Now, that's a romantic poem! Ida |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
but when i watch her walk, this liquid loveliness, i forget all about words. and think only of diving into her and swimming in her ocean until my words can become her beach... ~*~ I like the grit of this...  |
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RC Langill Member
since 2008-03-09
Posts 104 |
Your words are liquid, flowing, surrounding your feelings. Still, there is a subtle irony that as you lament the inability of words to capture the mystical essence of your passion, you do so anyway. |
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