Open Poetry #42 |
He Won't Wake Up |
openthoughts Member
since 2006-01-16
Posts 94Where the child can be free |
He Won't Wake Up A man in a suit said "Go or we're all dead" And so I went away That very day I was given a gun And told I couldn't run Must shoot to save the world Trigger finger curled Silence broke with a crack And cries of "fire back" The air filled up with smoke Free hell had broke I killed masked enemy So they wouldn't kill me I saw my brother fall Must kill them all Must kill them all... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I don't envy a man who must face a battlefield. You've captured the vision well, openthoughts. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Sad very sad. Revenge will hurt more you then the person you hate. Great imagery in this poem! ~Zach~ |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Stark and sad. Like Nan, I don't anyone facing a battlefield. This is a poem that makes one think. Alison |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Openthoughts, That’s the way it is. Good job on this. That’s what the bayonet is used for—to kill. Bobby |
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