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patience206 New Member
since 2008-03-07
Posts 8 |
the revolution will not be televised the revolution will not be televised the revolution will not be televised the revolution should not be televised but mine was televised and de-materialized before my eyes i cried as open eyes and thoughts of indifference made entertainment of my lyric and money of my thought i will never sell myself but others dream of being bought receiving pennies for their thought making revolution an illusion dreams schemes and money absolution i've been robbed of my language unique words assimilated and made aimless all for the sake of sameness so i rebel with this poem it still remains expected you'll clap for this poem with timed shouts of acceptance and i'll cry for my poem when they comercialize my anguish i'll die for my poem so you can hear an echo of my language. |
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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
Excellent starter poem to start of your experience here at Pip. Welcome  |
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LadyTom Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 353LA, CA |
Very good and very emotional. A warm welcome to this wonderful PIP blue land. |
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openthoughts Member
since 2006-01-16
Posts 94Where the child can be free |
I normally don't post responses. However, this poem is far more than deserving. I see enormous potential in your writing. It is careful, deliberate, and with strong purpose. Naturally, there is room for improvement and I'm anxious to watch that improvement over time. If this is your starting point, your ascent will be incredible. By the way (and perhaps it's just wishful thinking on my part), I saw what I thought to be significant similarities between our writing in both subject matter and style. You use some of the same techniques I do for what seems to be the same effect and I find your opinion in this poem to be almost parallel to mine. All in all, you've greatly impressed me and whether that matters to you or not as a writer, it's not something easily done. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
WELCOME TO PIP! ARCTIC WIND |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Cameron, welcome to Passions and this is an excellent first post, I look forard to reading more of your work...John |
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