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No good with titles, how about |
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peter griffin Member
since 2008-03-06
Posts 56 |
By attacking the factual, purposely lacking the attributes that the rest of us capture, You'll casually latch onto the magical aspects believed by ill informed Baptists, Suckers prepare for the rapture, preachers condemning the blasphemous, While the truth is evading us, we can never go back to it, Spreading like angels and apples, negative energy's cancerous, We watch it grow like a tumor and we sit, smile and clap at it, Linear thought rendered harmless when the images flash quick, Taking pride in ineptitude, we laugh at the circuses, While the teachers among us are stoned like rapists and murderers. |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Nice, very nice...as for titles 2 spring to mind........ Point Blank or Cyclotronic? More please ! |
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peter griffin Member
since 2008-03-06
Posts 56 |
Thank you, again. Too kind. That's it for now, those are the only two poems I have ever written, but if another one come to me I'll post it here. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Nice, sad but nice.. welcome to PIP and keep it up!!  ~Zach~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Outstanding. Too bad it's all true, too. I am really looking forward to more of your enlightened words. It is a joy to read thoughts that venture beyond pablum and syrup. |
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LadyTom Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 353LA, CA |
wonderful, yes, truth. About the title..I say, confused. A warm welcome to this wonderful land of PIP. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Peter griffin, This is pretty good--how’s about naming it "Preparing for the Rapture". BTW, there are more ways than one to "get stoned". I've heard some of them are fun. Bobby |
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peter griffin Member
since 2008-03-06
Posts 56 |
Thanks guys, I appreciate the kind words. I just want to be clear that "suckers prepare for..." is not meant to tell people that they should prepare for the rapture. It's meant to tell who the suckers are. I'm not sure if that came through or not. And Robert... many ways, but few good ones. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Peter griffin, That came through loud and clear. "Preparing for the Rapture" was meant to be a sarcastic title. Perhaps that didn’t come through to you. Or perhaps you didn’t want a sarcastic title, in which case I am sorry if I offended you. Please accept my apologies. Welcome to the gang. Bobby |
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peter griffin Member
since 2008-03-06
Posts 56 |
Gotcha. No problem, I always second guess everyting and am unsure if it comes through clear. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
powerful; effective (and sadly true) 'write!' Having been one, I am particularly fond of the last line [I've retained the 'stones' as keepsakes in memory of all that has been lost to the "Runaway American Dream"] v. serious applause for this 'penning!' |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
At first I didn't understand this, then I thought that I did, but now I have no idea...so I would recommend titling this "Al Gore"...James |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I agree with Midnightsun 100%. Enjoyed some actual thought. Ida |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
Didn't know what was going on when I read this, what I do know was that it was exciting and it sounded great... Please write some more... |
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peter griffin Member
since 2008-03-06
Posts 56 |
Thanks guys, I appreciate it a lot. |
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matronmedusa Member
since 2008-03-08
Posts 89Alabama, USA |
I do like this very much. It's a powerful message. |
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