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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. August moon In the haze There are no stars It’s only you now Whose reflected stoic light Shines down through night On the mute summer trees It’s just the two of us The crickets’ delusional chirping Lessening with each parting day The increasing silence Seems a wisdom finally come What else is there to say . |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
You say it with beauty in your words, John. A |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
Life passed another day through wordless pray |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
If I had the choice of one line written over? It would have been the last: I would have offered, "with nothing left to say." (just slightly more definitive, but still emphatic line.) But then, you know what you want to say better than I do... I just wish you'd say it louder.  |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thank you for reading I wanted the last line to be one of resignation. Thanks again John |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
The endding "What else is there to say" could be read with a "!" or "?". I read with a "?". Becasue wisdom indeed speaks books so there are "many" unsaid things and Not all wisdom talks silently nor all silence speaks wisdom my thought Tomtoo |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And August is now gone a month of remembrance anniversarys of life and love and circumstance... September is here a chance perhaps, to dream anew and live a new romance... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this...especially the last three lines...James |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
There always seems to be a more wisdom during times like these. enjoyed! "...buried way beneath the sheets |
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