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Like A Knife |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I saw you standing with your back to me. No longer interested in what might come up behind you. The road you were on was smooth and familiar to you. You took no other yet you were paused in mid travel as if pondering an alternative. You continued in the same way. Towards the same thing, never really caring that you had entangled me with intentional disguise dragging me along your road, not ours. I feel tired, cold and angry and still I try to become more in tuned with your world. Slowly I give up little pieces of what used to be mine all the while you keep walking. Only paying me any mind when you realize my weight slows you up. Resenting my presence Forgetting you wanted me there. Throwing barbs back at me. Punishment for being everything you used to want. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
painful... the sentiments inside this.. the reality of this something a lot of people deal with in their own lives... well done ma'am.... |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
yes. indeed a very emotional one. beautiful penned enjoyed the read Tomtoo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh hon... *touching the screen* |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Damn, what a gut-wrenching, heartache write! To have someone treat you like an anchor can be devastating. If this is personal? Please, know you are a dynamic wonderful woman, deserving only the best. |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Effectively worded and emotions conveyed. MoonShadow . |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 thank you all..it is personal, not to me so much, but to someone close to me.. I am an empathetic. Writing my purge of what I can't handle. I know there are others....  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
This 'write' is REALLY exceptional!... [thoughtful, powerful, emotive, very 'real'] very serious, long-sustained applause! [a poetic 'standing ovation'!!] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
 I'm clapping just cuz your here, now I'm going back to dive into your poetry  Helllowww Susan.... Nice to see you  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Only paying me any mind when you realize my weight slows you up. Resenting my presence Forgetting you wanted me there. Throwing barbs back at me. Punishment for being everything you used to want. Outstanding....I've known this guy to...can't call him a man...yup, these are guys...yanno? so good to read you again...but a painful write... Hugs Lee J. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nicely read |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Susan, it's so sad that too many times this seems to be the way of it. I feel you pain. A reminder to never lose myself again....I need those reminders.....thank you.  ....jo |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
true grit without punches pulled your style never waivers liked this |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
You captured the myriad of feelings well with this: "I feel tired, cold and angry and still I try to become more in tuned with your world. Slowly I give up little pieces of what used to be mine all the while you keep walking." Exceptionally worded, I think... |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Susan, my friend! Always be yourself. Never change for anyone. Be who you want to be, not who someone else wants you to be. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you everyone! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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