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The Tinman Already Had Oz and Freud
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The Tinman Already Had Oz and Freud |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Arched along the spine She came with the sigh of Dreams within dreams finding axis And turn upon the spinning hands Of faceless clock whose eyes are hidden Behind the hours away from workdays When holidays become the blessed vintage Pangs that cry of no remorse But measure still a rend of soul Along the perforations left Of pen points on paper Such vellum of skin As I would trace upon with bare finger Simple words in block letters Letting go the tomes of history within Each vowel as might still escape Chafed lips In long slow O’s She closed her eyes And felt the cold grow Trying to lose herself within A whisper she might hear Along heartstrings Or the tethered strand of soul That choked back the tears Lost through the years But still warm In a trickle of madness Some where in Oz The tin man trembled to the sounds That came hollow within his chest As he wondered how it was to feel Dorothy beside him And the Lion stood a shiver Listening to coyotes bay their mournful song To another paper moon Blackened by flying monkeys As he lit a fire using veins from Scarecrows right arm To kindle a blaze “there’s no place like home… “ she said and came again a flame of cedar While I too closed my eyes And dreamed her home In me |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this certainly does it for me....I was home the minute I started reading this.... so many images reminding me of a place, a long time ago... well, you do, what you do so well.. oh, and he was a lion to...  hugs for a marvelous read...loved the parallel |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
You write fine poems (I have read some of your old ones. they are all beautiful enjoyed reading this one too. Tomtoo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
 I'm tucking this beauty away! You are in a league of your own, Sir Poet! Giving you a big, appreciative hug, EA  |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~brilliant~ ~Chief~~~just brilliant~  ~baby |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
babygirl, you couldn't have given a better portrait of what the Captain had written... awesome, the both of you. But this, sir... quote: iwihwt... indeed, I do. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
While I too closed my eyes And dreamed her home In me I love the way you portray Tinman... whether he has a heart or not, he always touches mine!! Beautiful work! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
She closed her eyes And felt the cold grow Trying to lose herself within A whisper she might hear Along heartstrings Or the tethered strand of soul That choked back the tears Lost through the years But still warm In a trickle of madness Some where in Oz ~*~ I'm glad suthern brought this back to the surface; it gave me another look another wonder... another of lines... |
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sweetbomb Junior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 48Canada |
I like this very much. I liked the Wizard because he made mistakes. I'd like to see a tornado. In Oz Dorothy was the tornado, the traveller back in time who changed it forever. What did Oz become after she left. D |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ohhhh my....I will come back to this when more time allows and I can stop to breathe it in~ lawdy man, the way you write is so moving..... after a fall I get back up, |
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