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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
July exhaled these last days And I filled my lungs with the bole of 52 hemlocks Broken in sudden storms as leave the tapers Fine enough as burn to char Should lightning strike these trees I would breathe the scent of fir as it was consumed And in a heave of chest cough free the ash To leave the void to float Through skeins of wind Mindful of the holes As are left when you in absence drink Of sap from roots twisted deep in clay There are holes still in the air As August expands before the green hills And looms as might clouds that overtake the sky Before it rains or turns the moon fey with rings So portends the bark and twigs These whispers of lichen as hints Winter comes again within the weeks ahead Still I feel the hills grasp my ankles That I might not move from base And grace my skin with touch of sun Or caress the dreams of soft curved form And small chestnuts scarred by time An asthmatic stir of breeze July dies in anguished hours Marked by beetle’s click and creak of bones Long buried beneath the tangled yellow grass To hide the curve of spine I count to 28 Then multiply among the cocoons of lunar moth The recesses of my chest till still born the gapes within are found Wrapping clavicle in silken strands One by one by one And mends the best of jagged ends Waiting for pale broad wings to form along the ribs Close now my eyes And dream Of ferns sinuous fronds woven soft Among the broken Hemlock stumps As I search again for cinnamon and myrrh Mixed upon my skin I dream of silk and gloam I dream Of you |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
The entire piece is fantastic but this ___________________________________ Still I feel the hills grasp my ankles That I might not move from base And grace my skin with touch of sun Or caress the dreams of soft curved form And small chestnuts scarred by time _____________________________________ just ever so perfect capt....Much enjoyed. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
gentle one... ma'am..you spoil me.. with such kind comments.. this was written not long ago..but edited to put here, based on content and wording some might have found too much for the open forum.. the lines you quote, I fear are ones I just edited to "tone down" what might be offensive.. so I am pleased..you found them acceptable.. thank you again sweety... for the eyes and the kind coments. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
So portends the bark and twigs These whispers of lichen as hints Winter comes again within the weeks ahead Still I feel the hills grasp my ankles That I might not move from base And grace my skin with touch of sun Or caress the dreams of soft curved form And small chestnuts scarred by time An asthmatic stir of breeze this translates into a tormented consciousness, of whispers of images which brush by the mind, like a soft scented translucent scarf, teasing tendrals of emotions.... WOW, just Wow, your focus is embracing |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~even the watered down version...is quenching, Chief~ mmmmhmmm~ ~smooches~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Lee, thanks ma'am, for dropping in on my scribbles...that the verse you chose was pleasing to you or wowed you in any way..is a great compliment to me..so thank you... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Belle... well kid.... there have been a lot of scribbles I have written that should probably have been edited... lol glad my tweaks to this one didn't destroy the intent thanks as always baby |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I had to come back and dip my toes into this one again. Love the feel of it.  Toned down, is indeed just as captivating Capt. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
lol ma'am... only slightly toned down.. a few verses edited for words..is all. you honor me..by dropping in ..again.. must make you a glutton for punishment.. lol thanks sweety... for the eyes and kindness of your words |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
lmao..if this is punishment? then, more, please |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
lol your a card... thank you ma'am. |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Hair, This is my first time reading you (I think). But wow! This is great. Your style actually reminds me of Dante just a little bit. Wonderful poem! Cheers - Ed "Well I wish that you would cheat with someone, 'cause you're like diggin' holes in water and we know that can't be done." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Grim... thank you sir for the kind eyes and review.. in my eyes, my style is to ramble * grins * appreciate your stopping by and the read. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"July dies in anguished hours Marked by beetle’s click and creak of bones Long buried beneath the tangled yellow grass To hide the curve of spine" if this is rambling, would that I could ramble too |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
* chuckling* ah~ Lady... even a blind man gets lucky once in a while and picks two pairs of socks from the drawer that match.. thank you ma'am..for the visit and the kind words |
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