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MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

0 posted 2007-07-16 10:31 PM

        "More Than a Lover"

So many things I wish that I had said
before I lay me down to sleep at night.
While visions and emotions fill my head
I toss and turn with plans to make it right.
Yet still the mundane world holds tight the key
and blocks the dreamworld beauty so sublime.
Slow down I cry and let me just be me.
Oh, let me find the words please, just in time.

Please guide my thoughts and show my tongue the way.
So I don’t hurt the soul that I adore.
Do help me find the words I need to say.
To keep her loving friendship ever more.
She means more than a lover to me now.
A friend much more than that she’ll always be.
I wish that I could make her see some how,
the friend I love and what she means to me.

         MoonShadow
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Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

1 posted 2007-07-16 11:16 PM

beautiful and beautiful again.

enjoyed

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2007-07-17 07:40 AM

Enjoyed...James

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2007-07-17 02:07 PM

gentle MoonShadow
I am sure you could never hurt her soul
she is very blessed
if you are her friend

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

4 posted 2007-07-17 02:09 PM

so very good.

beautiful

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

5 posted 2007-07-17 02:58 PM

Milady Drauntz, you do honor me, not once but twice. I am humbly grateful.

James, Thank you for your kind attention.

Kate, Tis I who am blessed beyond measure and ever mindful of her gentleness. Thank you for your kind words, Milady.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

6 posted 2007-07-17 06:51 PM

this 'write' is grand-fine and superbly meaningful,
emotive Romanticism!

[a wonderful 'read'...thank you!]

sustained applause!!

P.S.: Great choice of 'P.I.P. "UserName" (ID)
too!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2007-07-20 03:28 PM

I come back to this because it really says a lot...sometimes when someone leaves us we have so much to say...but they don't really want to receive it...our heart has no one to share our emotions with...and that is the sadness of a missed love...James

k20z3
Junior Member

since 2007-07-20

Posts 10

8 posted 2007-07-20 05:23 PM

NIce good work.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2007-07-20 09:32 PM

I have always loved this rhyme scheme...hard to pull off sometimes

beautiful poem here!

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

10 posted 2007-07-24 04:08 PM

  James - Thank you for your kind words. The heart often whispers its song in poetry.

  K20Z3 - Thank you for the read and welcome to PiP.

  Dixie - I too like the rhyme scheme. Sometimes the music just rolls off the tongue if my muse is so inclined. Thank you for your kind words.

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