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FadingSun
Member

since 2000-05-01

Posts 76
Southern California

0 posted 2007-08-10 10:29 PM

The cold, leathery sand
sinks beneath my feet.
Just like me,
my footprints become colorless
as I press on.

A solitary misplaced leaf
falls from the sky --
forlorn,
like the companionless soldier
hungering for motive.

I descent in parallel with the sand,
it's golden grains
grating
at my withered cheek --
My mouth agape.

The surf torments my arid eyes
in waves of watery bane,
but still I
purse my threadbare lips,
in unfitting smile,
as I mock the light
of the last eve's moon.

© Steve Nelson

In the sight of Love, fear isn't even as great as a single hair: in the law of Love, everything is offered as a sacrifice

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

1 posted 2007-08-10 11:39 PM

excellent 'write'!

I am especially fond of:

"A solitary misplaced leaf
falls from the sky --
forlorn,
like the companionless soldier
hungering for motive."

serious, long-sustained applause!!

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

2 posted 2007-08-10 11:40 PM

WOW! First I've read of you....hope to read more.

DelilahStrong
New Member

since 2007-08-11

Posts 2
placentia, ca

3 posted 2007-08-11 01:03 AM

Unbelievable! I've been reading poetry for years, and this just moved into one of my favorites of all time. The expression and imagery in your words is enchanting. I'm in love with this! Careful... more of this, and I'll be in love with you.

Seriously though, AMAZING!

I'll follow you into the dark

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2007-08-13 02:33 AM

Okay...now I remember. Well, I think I'll bump this up so it is closer to your Part II. Grand writing.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

5 posted 2007-08-13 03:53 PM

"threadbare lips"

what an image Steve
great poem

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2007-08-13 04:44 PM

Nice...James

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