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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. Snow falls On the forest On leafless branches Above the frozen shore On chain link fences Around old wooden houses On a pair of swings The small low hill Snow lies On empty meadows The buried field A country road On cars Along the concrete curbs Parked in silent neighborhoods Snow on stolid mountains Another year closes Upon an end Yet each time Even now Under a winter moon Looking back I fall In love again . |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
 just because it's a joy to read~~M |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
it is a pleasure to read... indeed.... enjoyed |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful work... I thoroughly enjoyed! *S* |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I cannot help but feel amazement each time I read your work. I feel that you marvelously craft each word and phrase with so many layers of meanings. For instance, (and you may have or may not have intended this) but the structure is so tight here that you can read it frontwards or backwards and not lose its meaning. You begin and end with falling. The use of snow is perfect. Needless to say, I loved it. Still in awe... |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Thank you all This sat on my PC for a while. I write better when I take an instant's emotional vision and smooth it's rough edges in the days after. Thanks all again John I am, in a way, very fortunate. . |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
This 'write' is quite excellent 'as is'! [however, I will assuredly look forward to any further 'polishing'?!] serious, sustained applause!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I knew a poem entitle "December" would most likely cool me down, this hot summer's day. ~ and it did! But the tender closing also warmed my heart.  EA |
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Hyaunt Member
since 2007-07-12
Posts 74 |
Again, and again I fall in the dark world letting Love guide me through into now a darker world with a brightest hope to bear the darkest worry "How do they get my surname right?!" enjoyed your finely smoothed poem. Hyaunt |
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