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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Wrestling Thoughts There's that strangle hold choking me on hurtful tears knowing I probably deserved it even though the reason is not clear. Ruined a life, told to me unaware that artistic talent ruins a life and getting ahead in those early years wore him out, he said. Truth, his coming out. Maybe he is in his scared skin knowing I am at my wits end trying hard, working mentally to tie things up, and even them out. Giving up is too easy, though my mind wants to, and my body shivers in reaction on one of the hottest days of the year. I thought I was doing what is best for "us", the us that no longer exists side by side but distanced by those harsh words wanting to break down any memories that were created in happier times. What is the use? Why try to be civil when civility is lacking in his vocabulary and the easy way to "get back at" is to drag me down, pin me to the floor, to win the wrestling match just to prove he can. Amazing how the day started, losing the pal at PAY, rewarding myself with a "spirit" of friendship at the local tavern only to be berated by day's end, inviting the discussion of necessity but name calling rising to the occasion to kill whatever progress I had made. I hate days like this, when the only calm is to relate feelings to an empty audience knowing that no one can walk in my shoes nor hold my hand as I begin to pull myself back up. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I wish I COULD hold your hand... facing a most recent scam, reported to the pal of Pay and just waiting yet to have my say... knowing you as fair, I do... comport with misery, this woe of two.  |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
For me, this is an INCREDIBLY ‘real’, superbly powerful and emotive ‘write’!... [perhaps it is because it seems such an accurate ‘snapshot’ of far too many of our lives amid this “Runaway American Dream” (in the wake of which most relationships likely ultimately succumb)!] AND: I have come to believe that the following is also all-too-(sadly)-true’!: “artistic talent ruins a life(?!)” [only the pursuit of self-interest, money (and the power it entails) are honored in this land] serious, long-sustained applause for this most heart-felt penning! [I cannot write such finely ‘realistic Prosetry’… I grandly admire those who can!] [This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (08-09-2007 06:07 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
would you believe me if I told you this second "blow" of ego stems from a somewhat "civil" beginning of decisions needed to replace a roof which is all but falling off...and the criticisms of who and how I am choosing those who do it (with no cost to him). Never talk to someone who has been drinking~~ surprising what comes out of their mouths without thought(sometimes a good thing to at least know what their "truth's" are in their own minds)Anyway, it's a new day and I am no better off than yesterday. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Awwww Maureen, I am so sorry you are having such a bad time. I wish I could make you have a better day.  |
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Roysie Member
since 2007-08-05
Posts 102Canada |
I feel badly if your going through a hard time but is this supposed to be poetry? Because it's not and it's not prose either. Please google Sylvia Plath and read all you can. That's how you write about turmoil in relationships. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Roysie, Two things: First Maureen has checked her preferences for no critiques, so that makes your response inappropriate. And second, there are no judges and juries here about style or technique. Truth is Maureen is a long time friend in this place. She writes her heart, like many of us, and for those of us who have established friendships - it is enough. And since when are we supposed to write like Sylvia Plath. My daughter died and I didn't care about form I came in here and wrote my heart. Please reserve your criticisms for those who have indicated a willingness to receive them. Thanks. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you Larry, for your explanation to Roysie, whom gives no information about herself/himself to tell me what qualifies this person as a judge and jury of my writing. I have been writing long enough to know style, prose, format etc of poetry...and can write in any form challenged. I wrote this in my own style for my own reasons and whether you know it or not this is the open poetry forum where anything goes as long as it follows the guidelines which maybe you should take a moment or two and read. Thank you. If everyone wrote as Plath or Shakespeare or any other "known" poet, what a dull world this would be... Maureen |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I will second the motion asking you, Roysie, to read our guidelines concerning replies. If you wish to advise us what poetry is or isn't, be prepared to offer credentials which qualify you to do so. Even then, your comment would be out of line. If you wish to offer constructive criticism to a poet concerning his/her writing, it will be accepted gracefully. Simply saying it is not poetry and advising one to read another poet falls woefully short of that purpose. There are poetry sites where "slamming" the poet is commonplace. This is not one of them. Maureen is an accomplished poet who has written in many styles effectively. She need prove nothing to anyone. She has the respect of many here and does not deserve such snippets. We are always pleased to welcome new members and we welcome you. We simply ask that you familiarize yourself with our rules and our members before making comments that have no poetic value or assistance. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you, Mike. And Sue, please take that computer to be fixed. There are some who would help you with the cost if needed. M |
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