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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2008-01-22 06:48 AM



The years are wearing me down.
The offer is just not there
to help pull me up from this "down below",
a place to feel some care.

The tiredness definitely shows,
no matter the mask of face.
Missing is much of the normal of life
while empty, the arms of embrace.

Sorrowful thoughts on the rise,
challenged are dreams once in hand.
Let the passage of time break the stalemate one day
allowing life to go on as once planned.

So I rhyme to be able to feel,
executing the ghosts' rising each day.
Needing release from the thoughts that rebel
'gainst the daring to dream, I cache'.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2008-01-22 07:29 AM


Today I understand you fully, dear Maureen, I am not always up in the clouds either!

If I wrote today, my poem would fit into the dark poetry forum ...

but like you, deep down, somewhere, I know the sun will shine again ... and it WILL!

Reaching out with a big hug.
love
Margherita


passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
2 posted 2008-01-22 09:42 AM


write it out...at least you can...me I seem to have this block

I sit back and think what 'normal' really is these days

time to map out a different route, not so much the normal way but off the beaten path, time is not going any slower

loved this poem and can relate to it




Clang
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since 2005-12-15
Posts 222

3 posted 2008-01-22 01:39 PM


I really liked this one.  You did a good job.
secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !
4 posted 2008-01-22 05:21 PM


"I rhyme to be able to feel(!)"...well, that about 'sums it up' for me as well!

much applause for this very real, honest, emotive 'write' [both personal and
'universal' (in that I believe there is, sadly, an ever increasing number of folks
amid the "Runaway American Dream" feeling similarly)]

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria
5 posted 2008-01-22 08:34 PM



A very good poem Maureen I thoroughly enjoyed it. Always remember though, the sun

will shine again and I hope it won't be too long for you. warm hugs to you my dear.

Lindsay

Magnus
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since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135
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6 posted 2008-01-22 10:24 PM


Yep, this is only round 2,  you have
several more left as of yet....and you
are writing excellent poetry.

tonyV
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since 2008-01-14
Posts 36

7 posted 2008-01-23 12:03 PM


Amazingly done. I feel inspired to write after reading that.


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