Open Poetry #41 |
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Life is Suffering |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia ![]() |
Ray is angry at the wind Knowing that it carried ill intentions and the last bent screw that held the twisted storm door was cursed for being stubborn The drill was temperamental and the tail gate was kicked on account of its spitefulness It is Monday and Ray knows it's going to be a rough week He knows that God is testing him. I wanted to ask... If there had been a meeting between Ray and his god... with the wind and the door, the screw, tail gate, drill and the week all in attendance... In which he had learned of this testing ? But... I cannot talk to Ray when he is like this and standing with a screwdriver held in a tightly clinched fist... Believing that he has hands |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
I like this very much. made me think. enjoyed. Tom |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
Wow! I like this for the same reasons as I liked your previous works but this is even better!! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
He knows that God is testing him. I feel this way lately~~ M |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've been thinking about this one all evening. There's a lot of philosophical meat to this, your metaphor is dead on balls accurate. I loved this, and I wanted you to know that it resonates something familiar in me. Much enjoyed. ![]() |
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tonyV Junior Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 36 |
Superb, and touching. It's probably one of the best works I've seen here so far. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
bump ![]() not because I think it needs work, it does have all the elements I like, but I'd love to see more in depth commentary on this one. I do consider this one of the best I've read all week, I'm just a little bit confused as I feel like something is missing. (prolly just my brain) Back to the top, with a kiss for the ride. ![]() |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sometimes it is...James |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
There's something I like about this, it seems so honest. Ida |
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vandana![]()
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed ![]() |
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