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poeticdestiny
Junior Member

since 2007-07-29

Posts 19
Georgia

0 posted 2007-07-30 10:30 PM

Anxiously I wait
Listening closely for the sound
Of Beethoven's Ninth
To drown out the silence
Instead of this rhythmic beating
The incessant sound of the clock
Ticking away the seconds
Turning minutes into hours
And still I wait
Wishing to hear your voice
Feel it washing over me
To have your laughter fill my ears
Seeing your smile through your words
Closing the distance between us
Chasing away my sadness
The loneliness that I feel
So here I will sit by the phone
Continuing to wait.

Devious Intellectual
Member

since 2006-05-08

Posts 112

1 posted 2007-07-30 10:43 PM

well this is a feeling ive been feeling, i like how you hit the concept well and brought out the emotion expecially closing it nicely

Elan
Member

since 2002-05-03

Posts 382
State of Wide Eye

2 posted 2007-07-31 11:02 AM

and still...I wait.

It's amazing how slow time goes
when we request the unattainable...

Enjoyed this. Thank you.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2007-08-02 04:34 PM

Nice writing...there is a reason why the other has you wait and a reason why you wait...hope the reasons are the ones that will bring you back together...
My girlfriend is always back and forth to Chicago and my waiting is more like accepting now...a long distance relationship where you see someone less than you don't see them requires lots of patience and acceptance...James

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2007-08-05 08:31 AM

effective 'realism'!

[what I also term a "slice of
  everyperson's-life dejavu" write...
   likely many/most of us have
    experienced a similar situation
     and feelings; etc.! (a rather
      'universal' expression of the
        human condition)]

Applause!!

HopeS
Member Elite

since 2000-12-22

Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia

5 posted 2007-08-05 09:13 AM

Love and longing beautifully expressed

Hope

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