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Treagal
Junior Member

since 2008-01-08

Posts 38

0 posted 2008-01-08 08:18 AM

I.
Trivial matters of faith
Never seemed important to me.
A whole life waiting and praying
Is not a task for a weak heart.
I will never understand the soul,
Little, which is worthwhile.
Countless omens and prophecies preached by a world of fakes-
How could I ever come to terms with such words.

II.
A passing grin on a wrinkled face;
almost anxious to see-
What constant worship did bring him.
Lying on your death bed-
Why are you smiling?

III.
The constant struggle between the written word-
Sounds so sweet to the untainted ear.
Brought up and raised to be forever grateful-
To a figure only imagined, and never seen,
Did they really have a choice to begin with?

IV.
An unpleasant look crosses a young boys face-
The seams coming undone about what to believe.
A pair of lips cracked apart-
Presenting the crevice in his faith.
Is that really temptation?

In faith, as in life, what are the real demons we face?

Hi all, this is my first post. Be gentle, and Crit is welcome.

[This message has been edited by Treagal (01-09-2008 08:39 AM).]

Clang
Member

since 2005-12-15

Posts 222

1 posted 2008-01-08 08:33 AM

Let me be the first to welcome you. Great piece. I hope you stick around and share more.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2008-01-08 11:47 AM

Interesting contemplation...Yes, we are all looking forward to seeing you post more.

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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2008-01-08 06:45 PM

Welcome Treagal, enjoyed your first piece.
Ida

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2008-01-08 07:39 PM

A thought provoking offering.
I especially enjoyed the candor in this:

"Countless omens and prophesies preached by a world of fakes-
How could I ever come to terms with such words."

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

5 posted 2008-01-08 08:05 PM

and welcome from me! Enjoyed your first post hope to read more of you ... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Treagal
Junior Member

since 2008-01-08

Posts 38

6 posted 2008-01-09 04:22 AM

thank you everyone

. I hope to stick around and bring more poems.

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