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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

0 posted 2007-07-29 09:11 PM

Affricata

The sibilant songs
Of restlessness
Serpentine
In low belly waves
Awaken me to thoughts of you
Moving my arms to sprawl
In search of your quieting form
Calling, calling me
Deeper and closer
The turmoil building
Heaving in my breast
Adventures soft and wild
Entwining the taut perspectives
Of my muscles, gracefully flexed
To mimic the wonder of warm
Slopes and deep rhythmic breath
Moving closer, I whisper
Shimmering so, Aglow
A holy space kept still
All because you are
My one, true
Thrill

Copyright Kkh 7/29/07

Bronzeage
Member

since 2007-07-20

Posts 197

1 posted 2007-07-29 10:30 PM

Beautiful alliteration in this piece.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2007-07-30 07:12 AM

Enjoyed reading this...a lot...James

WindWalker
Senior Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 1218

3 posted 2007-07-31 07:07 PM

Yes, this was very Beautiful!!!!!!!

BBGrrl
Member

since 2007-07-17

Posts 181
BC, Canada

4 posted 2007-07-31 07:14 PM

Loved it!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2007-08-01 10:44 PM

A holy space kept still
All because you are
My one, true
Thrill

Love it all, loved this ending...nicely
done TD.

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

6 posted 2007-08-02 01:00 AM

T.D.,

Your poem is gorgeous, as I have grown to expect! I noticed you've changed your form here. As you know, I love how you've always linked your word, thought, and sound with assonance, alliteration, etc., but I am also enthused about your poetry written in this form. Great to read you again!

"the sibilant songs
Of restlessness
Serpentine
In low belly waves
Awaken me to thoughts of you"

I love the whole poem, but this captured me immediately! Love "in low belly waves"!
What wonderful description!

miscellanea

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2007-08-02 09:32 PM

This embraces, Kathleen, the myriad
and mystery of deepest Africa,
the stretch of life,
the need for sustenance...

and the symbolism
of what
we all strive for.

As has been said, you always give us
more than we can imagine,
but you do it so well.

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