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Robert Frazier
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since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

0 posted 2007-12-16 09:29 PM

You move like water
Leaning on gravity, wearing down resistance
I tried to gather you up
Into a depthless body
Hoping to drink my fill
But you are not a thing to possess
Slipping through my hands
Passing through my life
Would that I could quench my thirst
With one drop of you
Rain on me, sweet muse
And I will dance in full flesh
Till all my pores drown
In a torrent
Of sweet desire

Thalen
Junior Member

since 2007-12-15

Posts 35
New Jersey, USA

1 posted 2007-12-16 09:30 PM

-claps-

Really nice. I enjoyed it.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2007-12-16 10:20 PM

seriously, this is so awesome!

I really like it

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2007-12-16 11:08 PM

Whew!

Lincoln
Member

since 2007-12-03

Posts 62
Earth

4 posted 2007-12-16 11:47 PM

enjoyed

"When your deepest thoughts are broken, keep on dreaming boy, cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die." -Shannon Hoon

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2007-12-17 04:15 AM

Really some good writing tonite...James

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

6 posted 2007-12-17 04:29 AM

"You move like water"

great line

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

7 posted 2007-12-17 09:19 AM

This is wonderful writing, very moving,
I feel the wanting.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2007-12-17 12:36 PM

Robert~
This is *sighably* beautiful~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2007-12-17 01:58 PM

Lovely imagery here, Robert.
Thank you so much, m'friend.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

10 posted 2007-12-17 06:30 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

11 posted 2007-12-17 07:21 PM

Would that I could quench my thirst
With one drop of you
Rain on me, sweet muse
And I will dance in full flesh
Till all my pores drown
In a torrent
Of sweet desire

Oh, how captivating!

Very very nice write!

Love,
Margherita

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

12 posted 2007-12-17 08:00 PM

I've read this at least a dozen times, and with each I am inspired to write.

you inspire deep thoughts in your beautiful heart poet.

hugs

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