Can I tell you what I need

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MindBodySoul
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since 2007-01-10

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0 posted 2007-07-26 10:55 PM

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Can I tell you what I need
Do you already know?
I don’t ask for furs or diamond rings
I want my sanctuary
A place I call my own
A place within your heart
Which no one owns but me

Can I tell you what I need
Yearning for your mind , body and soul
Your eyes looking into mine …just because
Your hand touching mine just so that I know u are there
Your body pressed against mine for a minute
So that I can feel your want, your warmth, your need
A hug from you would mean the world
A tender word would set the mood
Astolen kiss would make me yours

Can I tell you what I need from you
Your unconditional love
The same love I give to you every day
Your support with no strings attached
Just your heart willing to give it
For you to hold me tight when I am feeling down
A comforting word when my life seems upside down
The knowledge that I can lean on you
No matter what…

Can I tell you what I would give to you
All that I am, all that am not
Unconditional love, that is selfless
My body .. the temple to my soul
My mind, the owner of my heart
You would get all that you never got
All that was never given to you willing
I will give to youwithout a doubt
That love you don’t believein,yet you yearn for
I would give to you….
All that I expect from you,
I would give to you

Jen--->MindBodySoul

[This message has been edited by MindBodySoul (07-27-2007 09:25 AM).]

Bronzeage
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since 2007-07-20

Posts 197

1 posted 2007-07-26 11:47 PM

Very nice, a sweet write.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2007-07-27 06:02 AM

Wonderful...James

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

3 posted 2007-07-28 10:56 AM

fine, powerfully emotive 'write'!

[I don't really like the photo.-image
accompanying it however]

I am GRANDLY fond of:

"Can I tell you what I need
Do you already know?
I don’t ask for furs or diamond rings
I want my sanctuary
A place I call my own
A place within your heart
Which no one owns but me"

long-sustained applause!!

Jaime Fradera
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since 2000-11-25

Posts 843
Where no tyranny is tolerable

4 posted 2007-11-21 04:06 PM

Dear dear Jen.
Well, I don't know you in person and so don't want to resort to the usual polite platitudes "that this is great ... nice work ...  t a t a ta ...nice work tec, etc ...) Anybody can say that vacuous stuff that you know doesn't really mean anything.  I can't even look into your eyes to see what color they are, etc.
I will just tell you  that you when I vividly imagine that when you sit beside me on this couch, and hold my hand, and you whisper in the only ear I have left, of what you need (and how many people tell me that stuff) And when I imagine that your body is pressed against mine, rippling with life, gratitude, need and desire,
My eyes are full.
You open to me a deep and directly honest understanding of how a woman thinks and needs and yearns and longs for in the secret privacy of her heart and chambers.  Maybe even the chambers of her heart.  Something that will never be revealed to me by anyone I know in person, probably, because the don't know me.
And you are telling me!  (Well it's not just me it's really everybody) tatata).  I will never see you in person ... I can't even see the photos people post up here ...
But for as long as I keep this write you will always be with me in your arms, whispering in my ear even when my ears hurt and I can't hear, and always conveying to me through the non-verbal movements and the breathing of your body what words were never meant to do.
And I won't even say thank you (oh anybody can do that ho hum) because ...because
You already know ...
You already know !!!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2007-11-21 07:20 PM

"I want my sanctuary
A place I call my own
A place within your heart
Which no one owns but me"
and
"A comforting word when my life seems upside down
The knowledge that I can lean on you
No matter what"

I relate to these thoughts completely!
Well done, poet!
(a library keeper)

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

6 posted 2007-11-21 07:28 PM

It is a good emotional write as said above. I take as the only exception the phrase "all that am not" which you cannot possibly give. However, since you are giving everything else, what more could one ask of you?

Well done!
Write on

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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