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Can I tell you what I need
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Can I tell you what I need |
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MindBodySoul Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 196NJ |
 Can I tell you what I need Do you already know? I don’t ask for furs or diamond rings I want my sanctuary A place I call my own A place within your heart Which no one owns but me Can I tell you what I need Yearning for your mind , body and soul Your eyes looking into mine …just because Your hand touching mine just so that I know u are there Your body pressed against mine for a minute So that I can feel your want, your warmth, your need A hug from you would mean the world A tender word would set the mood Astolen kiss would make me yours Can I tell you what I need from you Your unconditional love The same love I give to you every day Your support with no strings attached Just your heart willing to give it For you to hold me tight when I am feeling down A comforting word when my life seems upside down The knowledge that I can lean on you No matter what… Can I tell you what I would give to you All that I am, all that am not Unconditional love, that is selfless My body .. the temple to my soul My mind, the owner of my heart You would get all that you never got All that was never given to you willing I will give to youwithout a doubt That love you don’t believein,yet you yearn for I would give to you…. All that I expect from you, I would give to you Jen--->MindBodySoul [This message has been edited by MindBodySoul (07-27-2007 09:25 AM).] |
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Bronzeage Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 197 |
Very nice, a sweet write. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...James |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine, powerfully emotive 'write'! [I don't really like the photo.-image accompanying it however] I am GRANDLY fond of: "Can I tell you what I need Do you already know? I don’t ask for furs or diamond rings I want my sanctuary A place I call my own A place within your heart Which no one owns but me" long-sustained applause!! |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
Dear dear Jen. Well, I don't know you in person and so don't want to resort to the usual polite platitudes "that this is great ... nice work ... t a t a ta ...nice work tec, etc ...) Anybody can say that vacuous stuff that you know doesn't really mean anything. I can't even look into your eyes to see what color they are, etc. I will just tell you that you when I vividly imagine that when you sit beside me on this couch, and hold my hand, and you whisper in the only ear I have left, of what you need (and how many people tell me that stuff) And when I imagine that your body is pressed against mine, rippling with life, gratitude, need and desire, My eyes are full. You open to me a deep and directly honest understanding of how a woman thinks and needs and yearns and longs for in the secret privacy of her heart and chambers. Maybe even the chambers of her heart. Something that will never be revealed to me by anyone I know in person, probably, because the don't know me. And you are telling me! (Well it's not just me it's really everybody) tatata). I will never see you in person ... I can't even see the photos people post up here ... But for as long as I keep this write you will always be with me in your arms, whispering in my ear even when my ears hurt and I can't hear, and always conveying to me through the non-verbal movements and the breathing of your body what words were never meant to do. And I won't even say thank you (oh anybody can do that ho hum) because ...because You already know ... You already know !!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"I want my sanctuary A place I call my own A place within your heart Which no one owns but me" and "A comforting word when my life seems upside down The knowledge that I can lean on you No matter what" I relate to these thoughts completely! Well done, poet! (a library keeper) |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
It is a good emotional write as said above. I take as the only exception the phrase "all that am not" which you cannot possibly give. However, since you are giving everything else, what more could one ask of you? Well done! Write on  Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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