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Hard Day |
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Bronzeage Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 197
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Hard day coming on. Too much time last night counting stars on my eyelids, afraid to open my eyes and admit I can’t sleep because of you. Thinking of the poor proto-human who laid in the grass under real stars feeling the cold stone grow in his chest for the blue eyed female he would never see again. The first human heartbreak, before the benefit of science to explain the cardiovascular system. His large human brain knew where it hurt, and why. Two thousand generations later I am no better than my flint chipping cousin who woke one day to discover mating season is now all year long and the scent in the air is now in his large human brain and knew a life spent in pursuit of food and a place to sleep, was empty without something warm to sleep with. So, cousin and I both wake at dawn, He,with spear and pouch, I,with cell phone and wallet. He stands on the river bank looking foot prints left by the blue eyed girl. I thumb the phone book, trying to remember where you work. The hunters move out tracking the tender prey that makes all else we catch worth having. Type II poet. Its worth the work. |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
Wonderful comparison. Great write.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This was brilliant! Loved the juxtaposition! ~ very effective!  EA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Now this is very good! I am especially fond of: "Thinking of the poor proto-human who laid in the grass under real stars feeling the cold stone grow in his chest for the blue eyed female he would never see again. The first human heartbreak, before the benefit of science to explain..." serious, sustained applause!! |
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