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IN THE SCOTISH HIGHLANDS
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IN THE SCOTISH HIGHLANDS |
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kudanesh Member
since 2007-12-01
Posts 135Peterborough,England |
I would like some feed back on this if you could help me my punctuation isnt very good and my spelling can be quite bad. thanks for reading IN THE SCOTTISH HIGHLANDS In the morning you can hear every sound From the birds in the trees to the deer on the ground As I am sitting out in the cold The mountains are standing there proud and bold They stand shoulder to shoulder lined with trees That are battered and broken from the highland breeze The mountains stand up into the sky And the surviving trees stand so high The mountains have always been in this place But they still retain their founding grace Because of their age they'er battered a bit But you can still touch the sky from the highest tips When the clouds are gone the stars are bright You can see them clearly through out the night When morning comes its time to move on When you look up the stars are gone But look again they'er still there And all you can do is stop and stare How tall they are to touch the clouds Whoever made them must be proud Soon I will leave I will have to go I'll never forget how those stars did glow So when they ask what did you see I think I'll save that one just for me So in he morning with the same old sounds I'll remember the birds and the deer on the ground And when I am sitting in the warm The stars and the mountains I will mourn thanks given to james for his spelling corrections This was wrighten in the mountains of scotland 27 oct 2007 |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Despite obvious typos and grammatical errors, this is a fine first offering! I enjoyed your take on the Scottish scenery, and understand why you miss such majestic mountains! |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Aside from a few spelling and grammatical 'troubles'...this 'write' finely captures the magnificent spirit of the land of my ancestors (which I would grandly argue is the most beautiful place on Earth...particularly the western highlands...places like Glencoe and the Trossachs; etc.) A most hearty 'welcome' to the company of those of us who poetically traverse the fine blue sands of "P.I.P.-land!" serious applause for your penning! p.s.: I absolutely 'live' with a dictionary... spelling is assuredly NOT my forte either! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Very beautifully said! I also love the mountains and long to see them again whenever I am far away. In my case they are the Swiss Alps. Welcome to Pip! |
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kudanesh Member
since 2007-12-01
Posts 135Peterborough,England |
i thank ouy for you kind replys i do have a spelling and grammer proble i am dislexic i carnt realy spell it so i try to use the word spell cheack but thank you |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful writing...very descriptive... I'll help you with your spelling if you want to change any of the words...click on the edit icon at the top directly underneath your title...they only give you a few days to edit...here's the correct spelling... Title-Scottish, line 7--into, line 10-but they, line 11-they're battered, line 17-they're still there, line 19-tall, line22,24,and26-I'll, line 27-in the warm, bottom comment-written. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I am of Scottish ancestory and have always wanted to go to Scotland ~ now you have taken me there via your spirited and descriptive write! Thank you!  Love 'n Highland Hugs, EA  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I will be looking for your name in the future, Kudanesh. I appreciate first your beautiful mind to words; and secondly your request for assistance in putting forth a constructed poem so that it would read better to our eyes, and souls. Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I had the opportunity to visit Scotland last fall... reading your words, I got the chance to visit once again. *S* Welcome to Passions! |
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