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aziza
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since 2006-07-09

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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

0 posted 2007-11-29 11:16 PM

When the wind touched her skin,
the magic of fingered breezes
scattered the petals of dressed flowers
into billowing parachute folds.
She relished the attention of his eyes.

Silent compliments eloquently sung;
words silent awkward wallflowers,
unnoticed, stilled, as exposed parts flirted,
and danced with calculated innocence.
Each moment captured, embraced.

Perhaps merely a picture, a memory,
yet the dance of yesterday remains
everlasting as flowers drift on wind’s sail,
riding on fallen leaves to remind him
of another time that is yet to come.

Woven moments caught forever,
framing a picture of innocence.

--

Alison

[This message has been edited by aziza (11-30-2007 01:23 AM).]

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

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Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2007-11-29 11:34 PM

Woven moments caught forever,
framing a picture of innocence

Alison... this is truly beautiful! RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

SEA

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with you

2 posted 2007-11-30 12:21 PM

this is so beautiful....

aziza
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since 2006-07-09

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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

3 posted 2007-11-30 02:09 AM

Thank you, lovely ladies.
You make me smile.

Alison

dgvarner
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High Springs, Florida

4 posted 2007-11-30 02:23 AM

This just flows along so nicely...

enjoyed,
g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2007-11-30 04:43 AM

Nice writing...James

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

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West Coast

6 posted 2007-11-30 06:20 AM

ms az...innocent with experience is so lovely..enjoyed it

CudMonk
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since 2007-11-28

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7 posted 2007-11-30 07:48 AM

I very much enjoyed this one.

Cheers
Adam

Gentle Spirit
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8 posted 2007-11-30 08:17 AM

Absolutely beautiful A. Have missed you.

vandana

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9 posted 2007-11-30 11:26 AM

nice

Margherita
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Eternity

10 posted 2007-11-30 12:43 PM

quote:
Perhaps merely a picture, a memory,
yet the dance of yesterday remains
everlasting as flowers drift on wind’s sail,
riding on fallen leaves to remind him
of another time that is yet to come

A highly captivating read, dear Alyson.

Love,
Margherita

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

11 posted 2007-11-30 02:21 PM

Truly lovely, Alison. I particularly liked:

"Perhaps merely a picture, a memory,
yet the dance of yesterday remains
everlasting as flowers drift on wind’s sail,"

Helen

secondhanddreampoet
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a 'Universalist' !

12 posted 2007-11-30 05:37 PM

I am especially fond of the imagery
approaching the particularly fine ending:

"the dance of yesterday remains
everlasting...

riding on fallen leaves to remind...
of another time that is yet to come.

Woven moments caught forever,
framing a picture of innocence."

Applause!

aziza
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since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

13 posted 2007-12-02 08:13 PM

Thank you all for taking the time to read this poem of mine. I think we all love the comments that we receive on our writing - and I am no exception. Each of you has added something wonderful to my life with your words and kindness. Thank you.

Alison

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