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Martie

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0 posted 2007-11-25 11:00 AM

The Moon Undressed

I didn't miss seeing the moon
dressed in fog surrounding the trees,
then pulled to earth with ease.

In the room, I knew it by name
from the color on the walls
that were the same,
and the sleepy smile he made,
wrapped in perfect crumpled sheets,
his eyes closed tight,

asking ... "Is there a full moon tonight?"

I left the warm to find the hole
that looks into the place
where magic makes love
to the earth's still things, dirt bound.

The sky was muted silver,
(soft shutters almost closed),
a feather of an eyelash,
down in softened bloom of rose
made dusty lavender.

There, the dark was cast aside
by the pale shiver that fell over me,
tip-toeing barefoot across the damp
to the pond where I could see,
in perfect circle around circle
reflected there with me,
the moon, perfectly undressed.

Yes, there is a full moon I told his back
as I pulled the cover of his skin over my sleep.

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Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural

1 posted 2007-11-25 11:05 AM

Martie-

I really enjoy reading your poetry!
This poem is very descriptive!

ARCTIC WIND

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

2 posted 2007-11-25 11:19 AM

exceptionally beautiful, Martie.

Always a pleasure to read your thoughts~~

M

icebox
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in the shadows

3 posted 2007-11-25 11:36 AM

Superb!..all of it.

Thank you for sharing it.

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2007-11-25 01:21 PM

AhMartieSis~

Great big *moon sighs* here~

BEAUTIFUL !!!

Totally Luna Lovely~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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5 posted 2007-11-25 02:30 PM

A spectacular picture, this love story, the vision of you and the moon shining together, and then the lovely phrase: "as I pulled the cover of his skin over my sleep." ... Martie, you always, always have such a way with words!

Those who are vulnerable, and helpless teach us who we truly are. R.J.G.

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2007-11-25 03:11 PM

Nice...James

ThisDiamond
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7 posted 2007-11-25 05:56 PM

Beautiful write

secondhanddreampoet
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a 'Universalist' !

8 posted 2007-11-25 06:41 PM

Grand-fine imaging!

I am especially fond of:

“the moon
dressed in fog surrounding the trees,
then pulled to earth with ease..”;

“…the place
where magic makes love
to the earth's still things”;

“down in softened bloom of rose
made dusty lavender”;

Applause!!

Fairplay
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since 2007-01-15

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England

9 posted 2007-11-25 06:47 PM

I think this should be X rated

“ I left the warm to find the hole
that looks into the place
where magic makes love
to the earth's still things, dirt bound.”

I think your partner was mooning…..

On the other hand dressed in fog naked in a muted silver sky… I think I need some of whatever you are on….

I did get the drift it was a nice moonlit night and you were happy...

Eric

Mysteria

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10 posted 2007-11-25 11:19 PM

You truly are my modern day Elizabeth B.B. Martie, yes you are. Sighhh

MyEnchanted_Melody
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

11 posted 2007-11-26 05:42 AM

this is so nice

Thank you

marcel
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az, usa

12 posted 2007-11-26 10:35 PM

beautifully written. reads almost like a fairytale......

hoot_owl_rn
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13 posted 2007-11-27 05:48 AM

I love your imagery and word choice here...one simple moment described in eloquence as only your pen can do

Ruth

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14 posted 2007-11-27 07:27 PM

Martie,

It is so good to read your poetry once again! Your imagery is marvelous! I feel I'm outside on that foggy eve, experiencing the mystery and sensuality of the bare elements! Wonderfully written. Straight to the library, this will go!

Thanks,
miscellanea

Dark Stranger
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15 posted 2007-11-28 06:30 AM

ms martie, you are as amazing as the moon

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

16 posted 2007-11-28 08:59 AM

Isn't it wonderful to return to the archives
and pull out a favorite?

Margherita
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Eternity

17 posted 2007-11-28 04:18 PM

There is magic in your words, dear Martie!

A refined work of art.

Love,
Margherita

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18 posted 2007-11-28 11:27 PM

There is poetry, and then there is poetry.....and there is your art, which transcends both. The clarity of spirit you show is sometimes simply astonishing, and it makes me feel as if you're a crystal lamp, simply shining with it.

Heh-heh--I pretty much like this poem, can you tell?

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