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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Alone I sear the pain into my mind --endeavoring to keep it near-- from sorrows dealt of every kind; yet search the sky with hope-filled eyes, that mock the track of every tear, as in my soul is naught but lies. I've been alone for most of time, despising, still, that lonesome feel, as lilting tune and perfect rhyme caress my soul where wind blows clean, --and where another's heart can peel-- with knowing touch for things unseen, my self-made scars that keep me blind, and close my heart to what I'd find... ...if ever I was so inclined. I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I felt every word of this one John. Deep penning here... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
my self-made scars that keep me blind, and close my heart to what I'd find... We do forge the bars of our own prisons, don't we? Powerful, poignant write... I feel this one to my very bones. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
outstanding rhyme scheme!  this really hit home for me, because I've been alone for a long time and I can really relate to that last verse... I never really had to be alone if I didn't choose to be...just seemed better that way |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
Well crafted. Enjoyed. |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, GS. I am so pleased that you felt the emotion in this piece. It means a lot to me that people are able to access those types of feelings to my humble writes. John I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Thanks, Suthern. We do forge the bars of our own prisons, don't we? Powerful, poignant write... I feel this one to my very bones. We do indeed, as have I. Fortunately for me, a bright young soul came along and knocked down my bars...and now we're expecting. Life is good, even if I am still able to reach down to the old pains and feelings and pen a sad piece...from experience. Thanks for the kind comments. John I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, PS. I experimented with a rhyme scheme that I think I created. In any case, it feels original! Yes, Shadows, I, too, chose to be alone for many, many years. And as I now (miraculously!) finally find myself in a new relationship--and a great one at that--I have chosen to end my self-imposed exile. I am beyond happy that I have... John I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Thanks, vandana. I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Thanks to you, too, BBGrrl! I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran |
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