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Prismatic Equinox. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665
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Brumal vapour, leaking from opaque fields. Ice white,sucking summers juice from trees.Leaves scratching down roads, billowed to flurried carpets by cars wheels. Ripe fruit permeate. Blazing foliage ignited sporadically in copse, wood and garden. Titian the evening turns, yawning cyan skies deepening gently. Cows echoing sonorous across the valley, as mist rises and rolls across the land, bedewing the days fire. Ring out, wild bells, to the wild sky, ring out the old, ring in the new,ring out the false, ring in the true..A Lord Tennyson |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Are you describing a scene reminiscent of a Titian oil painting? I must admit, I had to look up brumal.... seems to be an archaic word for 'wintry' |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Phil, you write the most intriguing and inviting titles! ~ and they are always followed by 'haute' poetry!  Lush, colourful verbiage and visions! Hugs to you, dear Rose of Gold! Linda |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
A very nice painting! I could visualize it all! Much enjoyed the sensory treat. miscellanea |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Kacy... thank you for your reply, to answer your question, no i am not describing a Titian painting? Titian in this case is meant to be a colour? The colour is Orange or salmon? I wanted to try and capture the light as the sun went down and the horizon glowed Orange before turning to the deep blue of evening?The scene is a real one? Yes you are correct about Brumal, it was a frosty and misty day when i started out and i wanted to try to capture that too? Thanks once again for your reply? Goldenrose. Ring out, wild bells, to the wild sky, ring out the old, ring in the new,ring out the false, ring in the true..A Lord Tennyson |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Linda.. thank you for your kind reply...well the title i wrestled with more than the poem itself?LOL...I wanted to say ''colour'' but not use colour? And i wanted to say ''Autumn'' but not use autumn? Hence ''prismatic equinox''? Not sure i could class my poetry as ''Haute''..that would mean something like ''classy'' or ''high'' and i certainly am not classy or high? LOL..But thank you anyway... Goldenrose. Ring out, wild bells, to the wild sky, ring out the old, ring in the new,ring out the false, ring in the true..A Lord Tennyson |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Misc.. i am pleased that you could enjoy and visiualise the scene in my poem? If i can get the sights, sounds, smells, touches etc across to the readers i am doing my job correctly? Imagery is everything? If you can see it in your minds eye you are transported away to another place? And sometimes those places are nice places to get away to? It is always a pleasure when i am told my work was a treat to read, thank you for that and the reply. Goldenrose. Ring out, wild bells, to the wild sky, ring out the old, ring in the new,ring out the false, ring in the true..A Lord Tennyson |
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lightkeeper Member
since 2006-09-13
Posts 100pluto |
Phil... Beautiful imagery...wrote with consummate ease as you convey what you saw and felt ... i am transported there ,even though i wasn't there that day lol. Love Bernadette xxx  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Phil, the whole poem contains truly wonderful imagery. .... bedewing day's fire something to not forget in its intense beauty. Love, Margherita  |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Bernadette..You were with me? Where i go i carry you and your love in my heart, you are the inspiration that sets my mind to form what i see and to convey those feelings to those who would see my words? Thank you for your reply and for being you...? Love Phil.xxxxxxxxxxx Ring out, wild bells, to the wild sky, ring out the old, ring in the new,ring out the false, ring in the true..A Lord Tennyson |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Mergherita..thank you for your kind and generous reply. That day was a strange kind of day? When i set out there was a fog, like that of white clouds, except it was hovering at ground level. The trees leaves were coated with sparkling frost and they all looked like they had been cryogenically frozen? As if you could gather one into your hands and crush it to smithereens?Hence the ''juice'' being sucked out of them? The day warmed and brought blazing colour from the foliage, but before dark cast its cape across the land, the fog and frost rolled in and bedewed the leaves once again and with it completing the full circle of the weather cycle, to dampen the fire of the leaves with frost. These are days we must hold onto and love, they are unique bookmarks of the seasons and days of our lives? Thank you once again for your kind reply. Goldenrose. Ring out, wild bells, to the wild sky, ring out the old, ring in the new,ring out the false, ring in the true..A Lord Tennyson |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
This is a familiar scene for me, and it gathers one's heart in the tanscient beauty of a cool fall evening. I love the tranquility, and I often see patchy white mists hovering at ground level in the mountains near here like clouds suspended on invisible strings. The poetry is stunning in its imagery. So glad I found this sweet bit of November today! ~ K |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
A little P.S. I agree with Linda...this is a poem a cut above the average. It is a very classy poem because it is born of beauty and treasure and eloquence. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Klassy...thank you for your very kind words, i am always pleased to be able to brighten moods and present the images i see as i wend my way through beautiful scenery? Goldenrose. Ring out, wild bells, to the wild sky, ring out the old, ring in the new,ring out the false, ring in the true..A Lord Tennyson |
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