Open Poetry #41 |
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"Seperated, yet never Apart" |
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nevermore93 Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 73 |
I still can remember that day I cried so hard my tears ran dry for in my arms I held you for the very last time You left this world that day you ascended to the stars leaving behind broken memories and an shattered loveless heart I feel pain, a pain I cant describe which came that dreadful day, the day you died and now how shall I move on when all that I loved in life is gone Something in me just longs to be with you my heart is troubled with memories, memories that I only want to forget for every second I dwell upon you, my life is spent I realize now that I can't forget you Your love still has its hold on me A hold that I truly never want to ease I'm calling out to you, please mine again I can feel your spirit surrounding me silently calling out my name waiting for me to be with you once again to come be with you in heaven some day. [This message has been edited by nevermore93 (10-24-2007 09:52 PM).] |
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nevermore93 Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 73 |
Just fo everyone to know, this is my first post, hopefully of many. I messed up and didnt put the title of my poem as the ttile of the new topic. the poem is called, "seperated, yet together" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hello. Welcome to piptalk's circle of friends. You wrote very descriptively of losing a loved one and I could almost feel your pain. If you clicked on the icon of paper and pencil at the top of your post, you can go in and edit the title of the poem. ![]() Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug, Earth Angel ![]() |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome to Pips. It's difficult to write about such life/death events, but you did a fine job of expressing your forever love! |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I know too well of what you write... very nicely expressed.. RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
![]() This is hauntingly beautiful! I could feel the yearning, the love! You know you're in love, when you can't fall asleep,because reality is finally better than your dream~Dr.Seuss |
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comoloco7 Junior Member
since 2007-09-21
Posts 31MA |
through your words, those of us who have not experienced this kind of loss, we can feel all your pain. Your words grabbed my soul and shook it, as if it were telling me to cry with you. Very nicely written. Hope to hear more from you in the near future. In the blood soaked battle field, bleach the bones of countless millions who in the midst of victory stopped to rest, and resting they died. |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
So touching and heartfelt Hope |
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rugged_miss Junior Member
since 2007-10-27
Posts 26 |
It's probably cause am an amateur but i haven't seen anything rusty in ur work.. like i said i'm still an amateur.. N i've got a pretty good idea of how you feel but grieve is healthy they say.. letting out emotions on paper has made me feel better i guess it has to for you..? |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Your well-expressed poem took my breath away! By the way, welcome to PipTalk! miscellanea |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Welcome to the blue pages ![]() Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Orchid New Member
since 2007-10-27
Posts 4Colorado, USA |
Very nicely done. Losing someone we love is always extremely difficut. Sometimes their memories is what keeps us going. Keep writing...your descriptions brings it home for all of us. |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
very sweet poem...welcome aboard the pip express(ion)...this site is filled with the most wonderful people you could ever want to meet... |
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