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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2007-10-22 06:40 AM

I would be silly to consider
that you would be considering
stating for the record here or there
that you were feeling silly
to consider that I might be

but then there are always dreams
that drive reckless along curves
and volunteer to crash and burn
if they are allowed to drown after
in some willingly apathetic ocean

some enemy of love is guilty
of designing weekends and miles
and other men's hands on handles
that open doorway smiles
nonchalantly occasional

when my own are folded in prayer
to a plastic bag filled with sand
where you walked barefoot on friday
with your back to my oblivion
before turning around with a smile

and calling me your screen savor
__________

daark

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2007-10-22 06:52 AM

oh Mr Daark... can you be my screen savor? I do like this!

RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2007-10-22 08:49 AM

wow....this packs a punch...and then some...

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2007-10-22 09:45 AM

Incredibly intense write ... makes me pause to take it in in all its powerful poetic beauty.

Bow.

Love,
Margherita

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2007-10-22 12:26 PM

DS

"when my own are folded in prayer
to a plastic bag filled with sand"

You've touched me with this.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2007-10-22 03:38 PM

i love the title
and the poem

ARCTIC WIND

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

6 posted 2007-10-22 04:36 PM

but then there are always dreams
that drive reckless along curves
and volunteer to crash and burn
if they are allowed to drown after
in some willingly apathetic ocean

some enemy of love is guilty
of designing weekends and miles
and other men's hands on handles
that open doorway smiles
nonchalantly occasional

gotta love them dreams babe..

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2007-10-22 05:30 PM

you folks just bless me with your comments..thanks to each of you..am so pleased that this made you feel something special

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

8 posted 2007-10-23 04:02 PM

"and other men's hands on handles"

hmmmm...
lovely indeed stranger darlin'

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

9 posted 2007-10-23 05:59 PM

good read

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

10 posted 2010-10-13 05:59 AM

Those second and third stanzas are not be moseyed with too easily. But they are effective, too effective.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

11 posted 2010-10-13 06:21 AM

I like this. Strangely, it paints a familiar picture in my mind, but its kind of a blur..perhaps something I've forgot.
Its lovely.

-Trina.

There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

12 posted 2010-10-13 06:33 AM

eb, thanks amigo, I appreciate your reviews.

________________

ms sinfull..thank you for your reads

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