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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2007-10-15 06:32 AM

it could have been our friday
undone and unbuttoned
like lazy dogs waiting
for you to kick the ends out
of cardboard boxes
just to show your legs off
to the afternoon blue jean sun

but it was handfulls of photos
you wouldn't pose but you did
to my mind camera slow motion
as we just moved past each other
shuffling cards of moments
in a crowd of jacks with urges
for something in pretty purple

I told you stories about your prince
and dreamed of your prints
on the handle of my pen
making it spatter a thousand poems
in white ink on your tan paper
with love words every so often
in between occasional want to's

and now it could be our monday

___________
daark

Kalle
Member

since 2007-10-15

Posts 89
Finland

1 posted 2007-10-15 06:39 AM

Posing for the mind-camera slowmotion brings to my mind the lines of

Morrison`s My eyes have seen you

"let them photograph your soul memories your alleys on an endless roll"

Altogether I find this wellrolling and enjoyable, but cannot really tell whether it is that original as I dont read much American Poetry

Contemporary at that

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2007-10-15 07:20 AM

I told you stories about your prince
and dreamed of your prints
on the handle of my pen
making it spatter a thousand poems
in white ink on your tan paper
with love words every so often
in between occasional want to's...

oh Mr Daark... mesmerizing!

RDB x

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2007-10-15 09:25 AM

"but it was handfulls of photos
you wouldn't pose but you did
to my mind camera slow motion
as we just moved past each other
shuffling cards of moments"

this part is my favorite...love it

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2007-10-15 09:33 AM

Well, instead of quoting each delectable line, I will just tuck this one away for savoring again and again, and tell you now that you are one deliciously sensuous writer!

EA

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2007-10-15 09:53 AM

shuffling cards of moments
in a crowd of jacks with urges
for something in pretty purple

I love purple

and I love the lovely in this.

ladylisa
Member

since 2007-04-29

Posts 342
Florida USA

6 posted 2007-10-15 09:57 AM

Your work is always a joy to read, over and over. Reading pieces like this make my mornings full of sunshine and beauty. Keep up the great work.

lisa

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2007-10-15 10:33 AM

I will do what Angelo Terrestre did, tuck it away for further readings. It is exceptional, dear D.

Love,
Margherita

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

8 posted 2007-10-15 10:41 AM

Very well written! You are a wonderful poet.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

9 posted 2007-10-15 12:09 PM

good read

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

10 posted 2007-10-15 06:01 PM

kalle, thank you for the read

_________

Ms R & B thanks lady friend for the eyes

____________

Ms Suesea, thanks hon for touching my humble ink

____________

Ms Ea, thanks so much for the eyes

____________

Ms Gs, Thanks Donna for your touch here

_________

LadyLisa ms, thank you for your visit to my pen

__________

Ms Mar, you bless me my dear friend, thank you

__________

Ms Smart, thanks so much for the eyes

____________

Ms Vandana, thank you friend for the read and comments

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

11 posted 2007-10-15 09:23 PM

and dreamed of your prints
on the handle of my pen
making it spatter a thousand poems

~*~

I could use a thousand poems
about now...

so wonderfully sunfilled,
to read the likes of you...

it's been a drought.

Thanks for the water.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

12 posted 2007-10-15 10:48 PM

Thank you ms sun...you bless me with summers

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