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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Blacktop I saw the skid marks on the highway. The shards of broken glass. Now all that remains is the silouette, beneath a blanket on the grass. I imagine the Angels took her by the hand, down the tunnel to the light. So on this wind blown stretch of black top, someone's gone "Home" tonight. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
So sad, but rendered with sensitivity. They say it's good to go "Home", but this is not the natural way it should happen. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
moon, I have been looking for another poetic offering of yours. It saddens me, that it was this tragic loss of life that was the source of your inspiration for this sensitive and compassionate write. You wrote this with sensitivity and reverence.  EA |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Thank you Margherita for your comments. Yes very sad when one sees tragedies at close range. moon. |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Earth Angel, your comments are so kind and thoughtful, thank you. moon. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
Once again Moondogz another good read. Thank you. Question for you. Did you happen to know this person or did you see the remnants of the accident as you were driving by? |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Hey Seeker, thanks for the kind words..I came upon this accident on my way to work one evening..then the poem just presented itself. Almost like the person beneath the blanket was handing me their epitaph. Thanks JamesMichael. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
Such a sad think to come across. It seems we think alike. |
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Bobby Jordan Member
since 2007-08-13
Posts 491Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Moondogz, Good work with the neat couplets and end rhymes. Bobby |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Sad story but well done, Moondogz Ida |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Tears and hugs. Thank you for caring so much for a stranger, just like the Good Samaritan. Beautiful poem. On behalf of the stranger too, thank you. - Owl |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Thank you Bobby,Ida and Owl for your kind and thoughtful comments. moon. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
"Almost like the person beneath the blanket was handing me their epitaph." From blanket covered bodies to shredded diaries, we find sometimes a story of loss without ever looking. |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
tissue warning............but very well written. |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
"From blanket covered bodies to shredded diaries, we find sometimes a story of loss without ever looking." Yeah, maybe they find us 'cause their stories need to be told and they're not in a position to tell them...maybe. |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Thanks Lisann. |
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Seeker72 Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 387Oregon USA |
"Yeah, maybe they find us 'cause their stories need to be told and they're not in a position to tell them...maybe." I would like to think that is the reason. |
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