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Castanet Dance
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Castanet Dance |
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Bronzeage Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 197
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Sugar sand for twenty miles and we are alone as the tide recedes to reveal a brand new world of broken shells and polished glass and trash from the sea. Little foot prints fill with foam, dwarfed by the track of a walking crane. I stand in the surf holding back the Gulf of Mexico to shield you from sharks and stingrays. But today the only danger is a napping crab in the high tide debris who wakes to your stooping curiosity to do his castanet dance to a shrieking song that charms the gulls, leaving crab tracks back to the Gulf and toe prints halfway to the dunes. |
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Jess Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 243Washington |
Well you hooked me with the first line. The image you created was so clear and had a salty, beachy feeling. Great first post!  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx for this. I had never thought of it this way until you painted the picture of the crab dancing, it's claws like castanets. Good write, thank you. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very well written, my friend...didn't even have to visualize...you showed it well... jwesley |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
firstly...welcome to Passions! Glad you are here! secondly...this is a touching poem because I live about 15 minutes from the gulf and it is a beautiful place indeed matter of fact, I am beet red and in pain from this morning's visit which was a little longer than intended |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this flow of words...James |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
beautiful |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Beautiful ! RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BronzeAge~ WELCOME to the PiP pages of blue~ This is a great entrace piece~ I like the thought of the little sandcrabs playing the 'castanets'~ Was just at the beach last week and watched them scurry around and about ... next time I will know the song they play~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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gwaihir Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 58Sub-tropical, USA |
I have seen the crab dance you describe. Great images that transport me right to the beach. I can almost taste the salt from here. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
love love love this! welcome to Pip!! I look forward to reading more from you |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
I love the imagry and tenderness of this poem, Bronze. Very, very sweet. Good to see you posting some of your work and look forward to more. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh boy, am I going to enjoy your poetry. Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
I enjoyed your posting. This past Summer I caught this very event on tape. We laughed all the way home...from the beach. Regards, INclan |
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Bronzeage Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 197 |
Thank you, everyone for your kind words and welcomes. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
sorry I missed this first post, I am getting ready to head to the beach myself, your poem took me there, allowing me to have a taste before I go... ~ARH |
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