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Open Poetry #41
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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
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Waukegan
0 posted 2007-10-04 04:42 PM

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Autumn falls
Through blue air
A river flows
Into the sea

Through the door
Of a corner pub
The sound of a tin whistle
Being played

A soft nostalgic tune
About other times
A young man and his girl
Together under colored leaves

Pairs of geese
On the bank
Of a village lake

A covered bridge
With wooden eaves


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Misty Lilacs
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White Birch Forest
1 posted 2007-10-04 05:07 PM

This is so special. I just love it!
Marti

Home is not where you live,
but where they understand you!
       ~~ Cristion Morgenstern
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
2 posted 2007-10-04 05:25 PM

John, those visions are within my sight daily~~

M
secondhanddreampoet
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a 'Universalist' !
3 posted 2007-10-04 07:54 PM

WOW!...this one is REALLY a 'keeper'!

For me, this represents American "Zen poetry" (and minimalism) at its finest!

VERY serious, long-sustained applause!
[another 'poetic standing ovation'!!]
Huan Yi
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Waukegan
4 posted 2007-10-04 08:59 PM

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Thank you all

SHDP, I do value your judgement.
Time has rendered me down to the few themes
that matter to me.  My goal is to accomplish
one masterpiece that causes those after
to pause and think that we ourselves
were perhaps just as deeply wonderfully Human.

Thanks again all

John
secondhanddreampoet
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a 'Universalist' !
5 posted 2007-10-04 10:03 PM

If this particularly 'write' isn't 'already there' (at your goal)...I believe it has come damn close!!

Again...wonderful poem!
Margherita
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Eternity
6 posted 2007-10-05 06:47 PM

Such a beautiful atmosphere!

Love,
Margherita
Midnitesun
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Gaia
7 posted 2007-10-05 10:06 PM

Finely brushed with care, you've painted this piece with imagery that stirs both heart and mind.
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