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Facing the Truth
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Facing the Truth |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Facing the Truth I can see the questions in your eyes I can hear your minds as they race As you look at me and wonder What in the WORLD did she do to her face? Like George Washington before me I can not tell a lie I was out on the town the other night And you should see the other Guy! Well, that is not really true And I can not tell a lie I saw a show on boxing And I thought “Hey, I can give that a try!” Well, that is not really true And I can not tell a lie I was riding in a plane the other day And thought, “Hey, if I had a chute – I’d jump out of the sky” Well, that is not really true And I can not tell a lie My story is not all that interesting It is really kind of dry The bottom line is that it kind of goes like this The night was getting kind of late And it had been a way long time Since I had thought to ate (eat? ate?) I took a drink of soda and felt my tummy’s painful complaint and then like a belle of olden years Well, I felt a tad bit faint And that is really true And I would not tell lie My body took a nose dive And I took it in the eye Well, all’s well that end’s well or so I have heard that said And I just am a tiny bit bruised But -- Hey! I am not dead! Alison [This message has been edited by aziza (07-21-2007 01:56 AM).] |
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gwaihir Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 58Sub-tropical, USA |
I read this one a couple of ways. First, I could take this as humorous with all the explanations leading up to an embarassing bout with a tummy ache and subsequent spill. However, I can also see a more dark read which involves the Narrator never really facing the truth of the situation that she is a victim of abuse despite the title. Interesting. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
That is interesting. Your first impression was really the intended meaning. It is merely a somewhat humorous look at a mishap I had this week. It's not particularly well-written and I think that is the beauty of poetry. We can understand it on many levels - Thank you for reading and commenting. A |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
oh that is a good point gwaihir! I enjoyed reading it from a more humorous point of view...  but taking it either way, it's good! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you, SEA, darlin'. I like the humorous better too tho I understand both interpreations. Interesting. A |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
A, your write was amusing to me, AND it made me think and wonder to the end. Hope you'll recover quickly! K |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
The author has accomplished one very significant thing:...she has the reader's attention and a second thing, the reader will remember much of what the poem contained... I thought it was a cute write, enjoyed and I did not take it as one from an abused person, but that simply was my own first take on it...IF I read it more carefully, odds are I might see that connection... |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
Ali, even bruised and battered, you make me smile Maybe because it's nice to know there's someone out there as forgetful and klutzy as I am *smiles* Hope you're recovering well and that you get that all day rest tomorrow ---- just remember to EAT no more nosedives are allowed! love you! ~Sheli By words the mind is winged |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
:: grins:: I am glad that ya'll saw the intended humor. I have to write about everything. Even bad face days! A |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I love it Alison! funny! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gosh Alison  glad you are okay...I really needed this laugh tonight thank you my friend |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Reminded me of a day in the life of me and my girlfriend...she had an operation on her ankle so she already was walking funny and then she tripped on her bad ankle at the airport and fractured her nose...and she was a mess...and I dared not take a picture because I didn't want to remind her of the pain...anyway we were laughing about how many people would think that I had beat her up while we were walking together...James |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I know the feeling about "having to write" although my life has been so boring lately even I have had a hard time coming up with ideas. Good to know you will recover from your fall and yes, remember to eat.  M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I was grinning all the way through... waiting to see what REALLY happened! *S* And I admire both the write and your sense of humor... I wasn't nearly as imaginative when I sprained my ankle a couple of weeks ago and then broke two toes because I was favoring the ankle! LOL |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ah...a morning smile you give, and a thank goodness that you are ok smile, too.  |
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anam_cara76 Junior Member
since 2007-05-06
Posts 24USA |
Hun... days later, I'm STILL glad I wasn't on the other side. I've read it a few times and just giggled with each. Sounds so familiar. PS spending quality time with my vaccuums always seems to cheer me up. Is your's handy? |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Hi Alison, enjoyed the read my friend, the funny side and the hurting side, better to look on the funny side of life hey. Take care now. Rick |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
Alison I should admit I cannot tell a lie your poetry about your face explained you did not die. But the lies that rolled so efortless with seeming simple grace makes me wonder if the bump you took has only harmed your face. All mixed up or just for fun shall we ever, ever know in future can we still believe the words your poems sow? I think I'll wait a little time till mind and body heal before again I trust your words or think that things are real. I'll have to eat my meals each day and not touch soda pop for I don't want to take a path that causes me to drop. And I don't think that I could share the bruising or the pain and honestly, it's honesty not lies that entertain. But a certain little something that I see within your lines ensures that I can crack a smile at very funny times. To picture your dilema as in babling verse you swore makes me wait for more sweet ramblings should you faint and fall once more! LOL |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 lady, you crack me up! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
LOL! so sorry to laugh about your mishap...but, really, that is what you intended with this write, yes? *teehee* love the humor! g "...Never regret anything that made you smile..." |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This is funny, and God knows we always need more "funny." Sorry about your mishap but at least you handled it with humour and made the rest of us laugh too. Ida |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
As one who can't do 'realism' writes at all, I sure do admire those who can...especially when they do so with such a touch of fine humor! Applause! |
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