C.I.A. (caution, intimate when animated)

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Open Poetry #41

C.I.A. (caution, intimate when animated)

howardtsu
Senior Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 678

0 posted 2007-09-25 07:32 PM

                        Howard called his men back to the base

private :

                        do you think she’s headed to Anderson Air force base?

howard :

                        that’s a negative

                        Eve was long gone by now

                        and so was his chance to look directly under her eye brows

                                             and say "i love you"

                        still, he'd see her another day

                        if he had his way

                                            it'd be tommorrow

                        but Hayden’s orders were concise

                        only borrow what was needed

                        good advice before he conceded his heart

                        if only he had’ve been more precise

                        when he pleaded for a new start

                                          Eve might’ve listened

                                                                                      love,

                                                                                      howard

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2007-09-25 09:15 PM

It's interesting to find dialogue introducing a poem but I think it works. It sets the scene and gives you a snapshot of what's happening. I think it sets up the poem very well. I think I have to try this.

a good commitee can decimate communication.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2007-09-26 07:14 AM

Enjoyed...James

howardtsu
Senior Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 678

3 posted 2007-09-26 12:49 PM

you should, it's fun

thanks kethry

thanks james

Dull Glitter
Junior Member

since 2007-09-25

Posts 11
Iowa, USA

4 posted 2007-09-26 09:01 PM

I agree, very interesting. I haven't seen anything like before. (That's a good thing.

) Of course, this is with my *ahem* wide variety of poetry reading...
Good job overall.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.